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Saturday, November 4, 2017

#WeWriWa - Jailbirds


Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors where authors share an 8 - 10 sentence snippet. Be sure to visit the other authors. You can find them here.


I'm sharing a new project. It's a romance with a little mystery. It's a work in progress, so I'm open to suggestions. The story begins with this snippet.
  
“Mom,” Bethany leaned around the corner of the living room, “I’m sorry to bail on you, but I have to go to work.”
Abby Ten Eyck finished hanging the ornament on the Christmas tree that graced her mother’s living room window. She wiped her hands on her jeans—live evergreens always made her hands itchy. “I appreciate all the work you and the boys have done.”
Why Mother wanted them to bring down all the Christmas decorations was beyond her.
Abby glanced at her watch. “You’d better leave now. You can’t keep those hungry shoppers waiting.”
The last place Abby wanted to be on the Sunday after Thanksgiving was at a store while the thundering horde fought for bargains. Friday and yesterday had been nightmares at her shop and would be until December twenty-fourth.


 Apologies for the misuse of commas. The blurb and cover are also works-in-progress.


Abby Ten Eyck hates change. Her mother is arrested, with an unknown man, and she’s selling the family home—Abby’s worst nightmare. For fifteen years since her divorce, she’s kept men at bay. A handsome newcomer revives her dormant feelings, until she discovers his dad is dating her mother. How much change can she take?

Sam Watson embraces the transition from frenetic Wall Street to a small Michigan resort town. His health is worth moving close to his dad who seems over the moon in love. But it’s the daughter who fascinates him. Abby Ten Eyck reminds him of his driven self. He has to help her slow down before she burns out. Like he did.

(I used canva.com to make the cover. My 1st attempt.)






20 comments:

  1. Being the first time I have read "Weekend Writing Warriors I found this most interesting and good to read. Thank you.

    Yvonne.

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    1. Thanks, Yvonne, so glad you stopped by. Be sure to read the others. Such great stories. The worst part is having to wait a week to read more. LOL

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  2. I'm fascinated by the premise of your story (and yea to the Michigan setting!)and I think that with this snippet you're off to a solid start.

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  3. Interesting beginning- can’t wait to see what comes next.

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  4. Great premise to the story! Can't wait to read more!

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  5. An intriguing start! Having worked in retail, I know that dread of the holiday craziness. :)

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  6. Ahhh! A home-grown setting! Off to a great start . . . Looking forward to more!

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  7. Wow, a lot going on in this plot for sure! Enjoyed the excerpt, very smooth in tone....

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  8. Very interesting premise. Can't wait to find out what happens next.

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  9. The concept of the story sounds interesting, and I liked the subdued interactions among the holiday decorations.

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  10. How seasonal! :D Sounds like a fun read.

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  11. Buh. Black Friday. Speaking as someone who worked retail for 10 years...never again. I can't name many more utterly dehumanizing or mentally and emotionally destructive experiences in our current society short of actual crimes against humanity.

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  12. I wonder why the mother got arrested...

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  13. Thanks for all your supportive comments. You really bolstered my confidence. I'll be around to visit you today.

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  14. Great start and the blurb intrigues. No, I wouldn't want that job!

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    1. Thanks, Nick. My brother-in-law worked retail his entire career. The stories he would tell about Black Friday shoppers! Oh my!!!

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  15. Interesting snippet. Look forward to more.

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  16. Sorry to be so late commenting Diane, somehow I missed this post! Gret premise for your new book, and very seasonal. I'm intrigued and I think there are quite a lot of questions here, waiting to be answered!

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