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Saturday, November 9, 2019

#WeWriWa ~ THE SPY: Too Busy to Care

Each weekend, the Weekend Writing Warriors share an 8 - 10 sentence snippet. Be sure to visit the other authors. You can find them here.

Thanks to everyone who visited last week. 

I'm sharing snippets from The Spy: An Outer Rim Novel. It's the 4th book in my series featuring strong women on the frontier of space. Because this is a work in progress, any suggestions are greatly appreciated. This snippet continues where we left off last week where Genna bemoans the overwhelming smells at spaceport: No essence of jileena could cover up the odors.

Please excuse the creative punctuation, necessary to keep this within the guidelines. 

Jileena. Genna’s heart twisted at the name of the tiny wildflower that reminded her of the bitch who stole her lover.
Jileena Winslott—stupid, bubble-headed fem, though Genna supposed her name was now Jileena Winslott-Servary now, and she wasn’t the dimwit everyone thought she was. She was CEO of the largest mining exploration company in the Central District. The newswaves raved about her negotiation skills for mining rights in primitive areas around the Rim—good negotiations that protected the rights of natives.
Genna didn’t want to admire her, didn’t want Laning to love her. He should have been hers, and he had been—once. She supposed he was here in Eleganza.
Sherd, she hadn’t thought about him in years . . . at least two, after all, forcing herself to get over him had taken a year. Then, she’d been too busy at the training academy to think of anything, especially not her former lover.

 

Tentative blurb:

Rookie agent must rescue veteran before his cover is blown.

Genna Nogaro, new to the Coalition of Planets’ Intelligence Commission, is assigned to bring in an undercover operative in Hallart’s organization. More experienced agents died before getting him out. Were they killed by the intergalactic gangster or has the operative gone rogue?

Quintall d’Sernin, con man extraordinaire, infiltrated the mob and moved up to be the gangster’s right-hand man. Hallart has his tentacles throughout the Coalition—business, industry, and government. Quin’s finally worked himself into a valued position. All he needs is the key to mob structure in order for Coalition forces to take down the entire organization.

Genna will pose as a new recruit to distract Hallart long enough for Quin to find the key. If they work together, they can accomplish more. But Quin and Genna’s lives are jeopardized by a mole in the Intelligence Commission. Will their true roles be revealed before they accomplish their goal?







36 comments:

  1. A complicated and interesting plot, excellent. I still haven’t decided upon the twists and turns for Snakeskin and Failed Feather, and the ending... 😱...

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    1. The twists seem to pop out of the air--sometimes. One of the best (and worst) parts of being a pantser.

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  2. Oops.. Snakeskin and Failed Feathers... can’t even get the title right, never mind an ending 😳

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  3. Feeling bitter like that sucks. Sadly, I know from experience. There is one particular boyfriend from my past--an abusive nightmare--where I certainly wouldn't want him back, but I hope both he and the tramp he hooked up with drove off a cliff into a lagoon filled with ravenous sharks. I'm actually glad that she "stole" him, he wasn't worth having, but they're both horrible people.

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    1. Wow. I like that illusion of the shark-filled lagoon. Eventually, Genna's going to be too involved in her mission to care about him.

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  4. Curious as to what triggered thoughts of her ex and his new wife. A great snippet!

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    1. Thanks, Jess. Her thoughts went from the flower jileena to the wife whose name is Jileena.

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  5. You write such wonderful characters! I will want to read this book. A heroine I can relate to. :-)

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    1. Thanks, Teresa. Maybe you'd like to beta read it for me???

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  6. I'm guessing that somehow or other, she's going to need to get over her heartache and come to appreciate Jileen. But how can she? That's the fun part of the trip.

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  7. You have a wonderful way to capture your snippets every week. I'm completely enjoying your work, wondering what happens next.

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  8. You drop the reader so effortlessly into the heart and soul of your world, Di. Wonderfully dimensional scene.

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  9. Oh dear, old memories can really be bitter. I like the way the scent triggered her to then think of the person and then of her romantic loss. Excellent snippet...

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    1. You totally got what I was going for. Thanks, Veronica.

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  10. It's certainly easy to relate to her, but I have a feeling she'll find something (or someone) to distract her from her former lover and she'll be able to wash that man right outta her hair! :) Great work1

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  11. A great snippet with the angst of the past returning to the present.

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  12. Thanks, Lynda. Just when you think you're over a guy, something triggers a memory. Not fair.

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  13. This scene is so well done. Often a scent will unlock memories when nothing else would.

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  14. Bitter memories but I'm hoping there are new memories around the corner to ease the pain of rejection. :) Great snippet.

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  15. Oooo! Sounds interesting, Diane. As a note on your scene, did you realize that you said "now" twice in close succession? "though Genna supposed her name was now Jileena Winslott-Servary now,"

    Forgive my ignorance of your story. I assume Laning and Sherd are 2 different people? The blurb sound really, really good. I love strong fem characters. Bravo!

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    1. Thanks for catching that repeated word. Laning is a person, her ex-lover. Sherd is my made-up word for sh*t.

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  16. Aw bless her - methinks the lady protests too much! She obviously still holds a candle for him. Let's hope she finds someone better!

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  17. Fun snippet. I'm already rooting for her.

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  18. The opening line! Love it. Definitely grabbed my attention!

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  19. Great snippet, can really feel her bitterness of the whole thing and her dislike for Jileena.

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  20. Very nice post. Thanks for sharing with us.

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