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My snippet is from my new sci-fi romance novella MISSION TO NEW EARTH. Marsh is upset about something, and Sara doesn't have a clue what's wrong. She finally finds out.
“We screwed up again--in RT, it could kill us,” Marsh
announced as soon as the five of us joined him, his voice echoing off the hard
surfaces of the lav.
“You and your damn RT,” Tom spat
out. “Why can’t you just say real time
like a normal person?”
Marsh was right to pick the only
place that wasn’t monitored. We absolutely didn’t want the directors to think
we weren’t a well-functioning team. They could pull us and put in the
Shadow Team--our replacements.
“Okay, guys, what did I miss?” With a forced grin, I raised my right hand. “I swear I wasn’t dreaming about a day at the beach during the sim.”
Earth’s overpopulation and dwindling resources force the
United Earth Space Agency to expedite exploration of new planets for a possible
new home. When new crises ensue—a giant tsunami and the threat of nuclear
winter—the timeline changes. Eight years of training crammed into four. Sara
Grenard and her team prepare for launch, but are they ready for the one-way
trip? Will the Goldilocks planet prove just right for Earth’s inhabitants?
Before time runs out.
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I enjoyed her attempt at humor to defuse the tension. It says a lot about her role in this group.
ReplyDeleteThat's why she's the leader and not Marsh.
DeleteI like the group dynamics and I always love your 'voice'. (Although when I read 'RT' I immediately think of Romance Times magazine LOL, being a romance author!)
ReplyDeleteLOL. Not surprised, Veronica. Thanks about the voice.
DeleteI want to hear about the beach with the sim . . . but that's just me. Nice job, Di!!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy. Actually, later in the story, she uses VR glasses to run on the beach.
DeleteI hope her attempt at humor worked. NIce snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elyzabeth.
DeleteLove this story concept -- such drama and dangerous. I liked the way you worked in what RT was. My first thought was, what the hell is RT? LOL.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Cara. The thing with RT was a suggestion from a critiquer.
DeleteLike the others, I like Sara's attempt to diffuse the situation, and how you explained RT without telling. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jessica.
DeleteSounds like they need to work this out- it's a matter of life and death!
ReplyDeleteYou bet! Or lose their chance at saving humanity.
DeleteWhat happens when you're gone all day to an RWA chapter meeting followed by birthday dinner for SIL, followed by a dead car and AAA? You play catch up all day Sunday. Off to read your posts.
DeleteI wrote about a video game-obsessed character in a short story, so I picked up the meaning of RT. Loved the dialogue and the injection of humour! Great work! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Julie.
DeleteBut, what did they screw up?
ReplyDeleteThe sim (simulation). That's what Marsh believes. Prior to this scene, the director congratulated Sara that her team did well (even without her).
DeleteGreat group dynamics, getting folks to play different roles. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Shari. I tried not to overwhelm the reader with too many people in the 1st chapter. But the 6 of them are a team.
DeleteI echoe Shari's comment. They sound like they are having a rough time smoothing out their personalities and settling into a "team" mentality...a leader needs to step up. Who will it be?
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elizabeth. Sara is the leader.
DeleteI love the premise behind this story. They do seem to have some issues to work out between them.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elaine. Next week will be different. ;)
DeleteI hope whatever they screwed up isn't a deal breaker for them. Sounds like they think they'll be replaced. Excellent snippet!
ReplyDeleteThey could be replaced. Nothing will stop the launch.
DeleteHopefully they can make light of the situation... though I wonder what will happen if they really messed up. ;)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Amy. (See above.)
DeleteSounds like they're facing a very dangerous situation so Marsh is right about RT. They have more important things to worry about than annoying speech habits! Great friction in this snippet adds to the mounting suspense.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Alexis.
DeleteI like the humor, and how their personalities ring through in this scene.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen. I like hearing that.
DeleteGood that they went somewhere they couldn't be overheard to air their grievances about mistakes. Best not to let on that their group has problems.
ReplyDeleteYeppers. They have to be an effective team. :)
DeleteYeppers. They have to be an effective team. ;)
Deletelol on Tom getting angry about RT. I have a friend who likes to talk that way - I spend 1/2 the time translating what she said.
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