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Sunday, October 2, 2016

#8Sunday THE PILOT #WeWriWa


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New month, new book. My snippet today is from The Pilot (An Outer Rim Novel: Book 1). The Outer Rim series is about strong women on the frontier of space. In this snippet, Celara meets Trevarr for the first time in person. Unbeknowst to either, they'd met in space when he tried to board her ship. Now they're at closest spaceport.

As she stared at his butt, all she could think was oh, mama, and hoped he was human, that the rest of him lived up to the preview--better yet, she hoped he was in a party mood. After escaping from the pirates, Celara wanted to howl . . . and someone to howl with.

“Hey, big boy,” she called to the mechanic, “wanna party?”

As the mechanic abruptly straightened, he whacked his head on the raised engine hatch and muttered a Bricaldian curse about origins. She hoped he meant the ship’s, not hers, but then, considering her origins, that curse wasn’t out of line. When he turned around, she sucked in a breath, oh, yeah, a primal part of her sat up and took notice. His backside, gorgeous as it was, didn’t compare to the rest of him--he had the broad shoulders and muscles of a laborer plus the black hair, square jaw and blade-straight nose of Bricaldian aristocracy. What a delicious combination. 

Life on the frontier of space is hard enough for a freighter pilot, so when pirates stole Celara d'Enfaden's cargo, she vowed not to be tricked again. Determined to make an example out of indie pilots who disobey orders, Coalition Administrator Trevarr Jovano impounds Celara’s starship and cargo. If he backs down, he’ll lose respect. If she can’t deliver her cargo, she’ll default on her loan and lose her only home—her ship. More important than her ship, though, is her brother. To rescue him from a galactic gangster, she’ll even work with Trevarr who’s bent on avenging his wife’s murder.



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39 comments:

  1. Am I right in understanding that underneath that gorgeous exterior lurks a potential enemy?

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    1. ...Which can both be the same thing, ha. Nice snippet!

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  2. I love how she ogles him. And how true -- in space you can't make any assumptions from the back view what a person is going to be!

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  3. Fabulous - smiled through the whole excerpt. Tweeted.

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  4. Yup. I have to agree with her. ;)

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  5. I see why she's into him. You got his physical descriptions down pat!

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  6. Delicious bit of description. Oh yeah! Good writing.

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  7. Great description--yeah, he's a hunk all right. For some reason I kept thinking of Princess Leia ogling Han Solo! LOL Delicious snippet!

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    1. Ooh, I like that image. I've been ogling Han since 1977. :)

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  8. Haha, this was so great, Diane! Love the impure thoughts that flit through her mind, and him hitting his head in reaction to her party invitation. :D We all know what kind of party she has in mind. lol

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  9. Every now and again, one short, little snippet is enough to drive to me to Amazon to buy a book. This one just did it. I love the humor! When "Do you want to party?" is is a wicked insult, oh my. lol And the descriptive writing is good--but not overwhelming. Nicely done!

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    1. And you got a bargain, Teresa. I lowered the price for a SFR Blast.

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  10. Fun times ahead- as long as he's not too grumpy!

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  11. Oh, man. Too bad I can tell from your blurb he's not exactly the partying kind. Looks like Celara is in for a rough time with him.

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  12. I'm glad she finds him attractive, but I think she's in for an unpleasant surprise.

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  13. Well, she made quite an impression on him--and on his skull!

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  14. I wonder which one will have the headache in the end? LOL!

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  15. I love all the speculation. You guys have wicked imaginations. LOL

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  16. Love the description of this guy. I'm intrigued.

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  17. I LOVED the snippet. Your character's 'voice' is wonderful :) Terrific!

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  18. Oooh, I'm intrigued! He sounds yummy!

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  19. "After escaping from the pirates, Celara wanted to howl . . . and someone to howl with."

    I had to bite back my giggle because my Accomplice is sleeping beside me, and I think he might react a bit like Mr. Nice Rear View if I woke him giggling at fictional bawdy pirate-ladies in space...

    I loved this!

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  20. I don't usually like description, but this was delicious! :-)

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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  21. Perfect description of a perfect humk. Nice.

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  22. You can't beat an opening line like that!

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  23. Hoo! That was fun. Makes me want to keep reading!

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  24. Ladies, you made me laugh. No waking the Accomplice, Shah.

    Joyce, I don't like reading descriptions, either. Glad this one was delicious. :)

    Deniz, glad to hear that.

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