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Saturday, December 10, 2016

#WeWriWa - #Sunday: Bygone Brother - Killer's Mom


Welcome to Weekend Writing Warrior and 8 Sentence Sunday, the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! Writers share an 8 to10 sentence snippet. Be sure to visit the other writers. You can find them here.

This is the last snippet from my PI mystery, The Case of the Bygone Brother, a contemporary cozy, that takes place in a small Lake Michigan resort town. Alex (Alexandra) O'Hara has taken over her dad's investigation agency, struggling to keep it going. Alex and Nick are surveilling a client's husband. This snippet picks up with Alex escaping over the fence after peeking in the basement window.
On the other side of the fence, practically nose-to-nose with me, stood Mother Nature’s idea of a joke--the monster dog, a cross between a rag mop and a small beagle. Nick and I scrambled back to the car.
Inside, I started laughing and Nick said, “Killer?”
That set me off again, “Don’t make me laugh or I’ll pee my pants,” I groaned—I couldn’t believe I said that.
I sobered quickly and, as I started the car, I said, “So much for catching my client’s husband doing the hanky-panky.”
“You didn’t get pictures? You have got to be kidding, after all that, you—”
“No hanky-panky—” shooting him a gloating look “—more like the waltz.”
“Say again.”
“Killer’s mother is a dance instructor.


Alex O’Hara finally gets a case that will give her bottom line a much needed boost. She might even be able to change her diet from ramen noodles to prime rib. All she has to do is track down a man who’s been missing for over ten years. Piece of cake . . . until an old flame arrives and a mugger roughs her up with orders to back off.

30 comments:

  1. Sounds like the guy was trying to surprise his wife. Glad Alex was able to get away from "Killer". LOL Great snippet! :)

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  2. Hmm. I wonder if waltzing is grounds for divorce?

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  3. Definitly or maybe the tango. At least they are having a good laugh while investigating.

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  4. That made me laugh. Thank you!

    So the next question: why is he learning to dance?

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  5. That made me laugh. Thank you!

    So the next question: why is he learning to dance?

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  6. "a rag mop and a small beagle", oh that made me laugh so hard! Perfect visual! :D *high-fives*

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  7. Haha, suspicious of a husband learning to dance. Now I wonder how the wife is going to take it.

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  8. Hmm and why would be learning to dance? I think she's about to get a good surprise rather than a bad one.

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  9. Ok that was just great all the way around, from the dog to the dance instructor. Really enjoyed these snippets!

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  10. A great snippet - humorous, and with great dialogue. Loved it!

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  11. Great banter! Love this snippet! And see how I can finally post comments on blogger?! A cookies problem...must have something to do with Santa! LOL!

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  12. Haha! I guess dancing lessons are good news.

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  13. Ha! Love this exchange, and the bit about being nose-to-nose with the monster dog. Great snippet. :)

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  14. This is a great story. I loved this book!

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  15. Another great snippet!
    Good luck and God's blessings
    PamT

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  16. Ha, love this book. Excellent snippet!

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  17. I love all the great comments. So glad you enjoyed the snippet.

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  18. Aww, I'm sad we won't get any more excerpts from this book. I've been loving it! So enjoy the banter between these two!

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  19. This is hysterical. I thought Killer might not live up to his name. LOL But the plot thickens. Killer's mom is a dance instructor. Great twist!

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  20. Oh, Killer sounds perfect! Poor guy, he's just trying to defend his people, and he gets laughed at.

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  21. That was great. It was the image of the monster dog that got me!

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  22. That was great. It was the image of the monster dog that got me!

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  23. Julie, I'm so glad you've enjoyed the banter.

    Jenna, laughing out loud. Don't you wonder why he's taking dance lessons? :)

    Thanks, Marissa.

    Thanks, Caitlin. When I watch the dog shows, I wonder what would happen if 2 disparate breeds intermingled. Poor Killer.

    Nick, glad you enjoyed it.

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  24. My daughter has been rooting for a Great Dane/chihuahua cross! I love your little rag mop/beagle.

    A waltz, eh? Methinks the wife might have the wrong idea, or these two have an interesting type of intro to hanky-panky (and, as I wrote this, I remembered that I've written a scene where a waltz led to hanky-panky, and then a proposal, so what do I know?)

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    1. LOL, Shan. My DIL has a Great Dane and her mother has a Chihuahua. OMG.

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