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My snippet is from my upcoming release, THE CASE OF THE MEDDLING MAMA, an Alex O'Hara Novel, third in my PI mystery series. Along with some creative punctuation, it hasn't been edited yet, so suggestions are welcome.
In this snippet, Alex has changed into "professional" attire and is waiting for a client in her office.
“Hello, gorgeous,” Nick said from the open doorway
between our offices.
I wanted so much to fly into his arms, have him hold me
and say everything would work out, but not with his mother nearby--and not when I'm supposed to be Ms. Independent.
“You’re back.” I gave him a
brilliant smile to make up for not jumping his bones.
He sauntered in, pulled me out of
my chair, and planted a kiss on me that melted my pantyhose. Good Lord, could
that man kiss.
When I came up for air, common
sense reared its ugly head, and I whispered, “Not with your mother in the next room.”
Nick pulled away, reluctance and disappointment plastered on his face. “The offices
are soundproof, she doesn’t know what we’re doing.”
“Don’t count on it.”
Once again, Alex O’Hara is up to her ears in mysteries. After surviving an attempted murder, all she wants is R&R time with Nick Palzetti. But his mother leaving his father (“that horse’s patoot”) and moving in with Alex puts a crimp in their plans. Then Nick leaves on assignment and the teen she rescued from an abusive father believes his buddy is doing drugs. Meanwhile, Alex has two easy cases to take her mind off her shaky relationship with Nick—a philandering husband and a background check on a client’s boyfriend. Piece of cake.
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Haha! I bet Mama knows EVERYTHING! :-)
ReplyDeleteGreat excerpt, Diane!
LOL Thanks, Teresa.
DeleteRule of thumb that Nick wants to ignore: Mama always knows what's going on in the next room.
ReplyDeleteLOL
DeleteDoesn't mama want them to kiss?
ReplyDeleteAlex is too embarrassed.
DeleteLove the humor blended with heat. Good job.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Charmaine.
DeleteLOL Sounds like they were caught. Nick has some explaining to do to his Mama and Alex. Great snippet! :)
ReplyDeleteHe has a lot of explaining to do! Thanks, Jess.
DeleteFun excerpt! The presence of the mama so close by certainly has an effect on her!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica.
DeleteI love the tone of this piece, Diane.
ReplyDelete"...planted a kiss on me that melted my pantyhose" is a classic. Excellent job!
Thanks, Kim. I tried not to get too graphic. :)
DeleteI love the tone of this piece, Diane.
ReplyDelete"...planted a kiss on me that melted my pantyhose" is a classic. Excellent job!
We moms have ESP when it comes to that kind of thing, you know. Great snippet, Di!
ReplyDeleteMamas have eyes in the back of our heads. We can hear everything. We have super powers. LOL Thanks, Nancy.
DeleteI share all the points above. A lovely snippet. Mothers can see through walls, don't you know!
ReplyDeleteOf course, we can. LOL Thanks, Juliette.
DeleteHe's back! But with meddling Mama in the next room, they're right to keep it quiet.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely.
DeleteAs with my husband, I appreciate the enthusiasm, but modesty is virtue!! LOL
ReplyDeleteGood one, Kimbely.
DeleteHopefully they can keep it quiet, but if his kisses are that good, I think they're headed for trouble. ;)
ReplyDeleteA sound-proof office and a locked door might help.
DeleteI love this line: "planted a kiss on me that melted my pantyhose." I'm saving it for future reference.
ReplyDeleteLOL Glad you liked it.
DeleteOh my gosh, mother-in-law to be in next room definitely smothers some of the fire...apparently not all of it, though. ;)
ReplyDeleteWhat can I say? ;)
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