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Saturday, February 3, 2018

#WeWriWa The Story Begins


Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors where authors share an 8 - 10 sentence snippet. Be sure to visit the other authors. You can find them here

Thanks for all your comments on last week's snippet. This week, I'm sharing a new story, a work-in-progress. Suggestions are very welcome. It's a romantic suspense about a woman who doesn't believe her brother's car crash was an accident. This is how it begins.
 
The garage door rose. All by itself.
Maggie Sinclair’s heart shot into high gear. She set down the camping equipment next to her SUV. She wasn’t anywhere near the button next to the door to the house. And the remote was right where it belonged, clipped to the Suburban’s visor. She hadn’t opened the door.
Someone had keyed in the code.
As the door lifted, a pair of athletic shoes and legs encased in wrinkled khakis came into view. Only one other person knew the code to her garage. The numb-nut scaring her half to death had better be him.







30 comments:

  1. Yikes! My heart is beating a little faster here. Fabulous snippet! 😄 Though, it reminds me of a time we were visiting my grandmother, and the key fob for our vehicle triggered a neighbor's garage door to open.

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    1. Jess, you made my day. Thanks for the kind words. LOL at your story about the key fob. That must have been scary for the neighbor.

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  2. What a beautifully suspenseful way of setting this scene. Good job.

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    1. Thanks, Ed. And congrats on your SFR Galaxy award.

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  3. Whew! What an exciting beginning!

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  4. Wow, that's quite the beginning! Intrigued by the story and the snippet...

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  5. Beautifully descriptive, a great start to what promises to be a very intriguing story. Can't wait to read more

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  6. Wow - great way to start a story, brilliantly suspenseful!

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  7. You captured her emotions well- from alarm to fear to anger-while creating great suspense. Great snippet!

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  8. What if it's not who she thinks?? ;)

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    1. You'll see next week. She doesn't stand around waiting for danger.

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  9. Entertaining beginning. I hope it's who she expects.

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  10. "The numb-nut scaring her half to death had better be him."

    That was the perfect wrap up to this snippet!

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  11. Great opening lines and great opening. Draws the read right in - who is the numb-nut is. Tweeted.

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  12. I love the way you balance fright with humor! Fun start to the new project.

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  13. She's on edge... hopefully this visitor will be able to smooth that a bit.

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  14. Fear, relief and anger for making her scared... great roller coaster of emotions in this snippet. Loved it.

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  15. Oh my, what if it isn't him? I hope she is armed, or can hide.

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