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Saturday, June 16, 2018

#WeWriWa - NUMBERS NEVER LIE - Jack Played Hooky?


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I'm sharing snippets from my wip, NUMBERS NEVER LIE, a romantic suspense. Maggie and Drew returned from the camping trip to her hot and stuffy house. This snippet continues right after last week's.

Please ignore the errant commas that kept this snippet to the required length.



Maggie stopped cranking open the window above the sink, “Jack called you on Friday? He was here that afternoon.”
“He wasn’t at work? Jack, the workaholic, played hooky?” Drew walked around the kitchen table to open the slider to the deck.
“Is that the pot calling the kettle black?” She gave him a pointed look. “The man who was too busy to come to a meeting for his daughter.”
“You’ve made your point as tactfully as ever.” He returned her pointed look, “I thought we were discussing Jack.”


Blurb:

A shocking secret brings danger to Jack Sinclair and his sister Maggie. 

As kids, they were the fearless threesome. As adults, Jack's an accountant; Drew, a lawyer; Maggie, a teacher and camping troop leader. Returning from a weekend camping trip, Maggie receives horrifying news. She refuses to believe her brother’s fatal car crash was an accident. If the police won’t investigate, she’ll do it herself. Convincing Drew Campbell to help is her only recourse.

Drew Campbell was too busy to return his best friend’s phone call. Too busy to attend a camping meeting important to his teen daughter. Too busy to stay in touch with Jack. Logic and reason indicate Jack’s accident was just that--an accident caused by fatigue and fog. Prodded by guilt, he’ll help Maggie even if he thinks she’s wrong.

A break-in at Jack’s condo convinces Maggie she’s right. Then her home is searched. What did Jack leave behind?



Wishing all the dads a Happy Father's Day. My three guys--Hubs, Son, and Son-in-Law--are very special dads.




24 comments:

  1. Some great tension between these two characters, as well as a hint of mystery developing. Well done!

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  2. Oh, she's still taking her shots at him, sliding them in wherever she can. :-) Good snippet!

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  3. She never gives up and she's so clever. terrific snippet.

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  4. Love the dialogue. On the snarky side.#8sunday

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  5. Not the world's best dad, apparently. Great to see you yesterday, Di!

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    1. Thanks, Nancy. Great seeing you, too. He isn't quite as bad as the reader has seen.

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  6. The dialog flows so naturally in this scene, really enjoyed it. Although the two of them are quite oblivious to the foreshadowing the author os carrying out, letting US know something was seriously up with Jack, right? Enjoyed the snippet!

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  7. Great snippet! The dialogue feels authentic.

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  8. I liked the very believable touch of snark between them.

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  9. Is her "pointed look" dagger sharp?

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  10. Love the familiarity of their banter!

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    1. Thanks, Christina. They're reverting back to the old friendship.

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