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I'm sharing snippets from my wip, NUMBERS NEVER LIE, a romantic suspense. Maggie and Drew returned from the camping trip to her hot and stuffy house. This snippet continues right after last week's.
Please ignore the errant commas that kept this snippet to the required length.
Maggie stopped cranking open
the window above the sink, “Jack called you on Friday? He was here that
afternoon.”
“He wasn’t at work? Jack, the
workaholic, played hooky?” Drew walked around the kitchen table to open the
slider to the deck.
“Is that the pot calling the
kettle black?” She gave him a pointed look. “The man who was too busy to come
to a meeting for his daughter.”
“You’ve made your point as
tactfully as ever.” He returned her pointed look, “I thought we were discussing
Jack.”
Blurb:
A shocking secret brings danger to Jack Sinclair and his sister Maggie.
As kids, they were the fearless threesome. As adults, Jack's an accountant; Drew, a lawyer; Maggie, a teacher and camping troop leader. Returning from a weekend camping trip, Maggie receives horrifying news. She refuses to believe her brother’s fatal car crash was an accident. If the police won’t investigate, she’ll do it herself. Convincing Drew Campbell to help is her only recourse.
Drew Campbell was too busy to return his best friend’s phone call. Too busy to attend a camping meeting important to his teen daughter. Too busy to stay in touch with Jack. Logic and reason indicate Jack’s accident was just that--an accident caused by fatigue and fog. Prodded by guilt, he’ll help Maggie even if he thinks she’s wrong.
A break-in at Jack’s condo convinces Maggie she’s right. Then her home is searched. What did Jack leave behind?
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Wishing all the dads a Happy Father's Day. My three guys--Hubs, Son, and Son-in-Law--are very special dads.
Some great tension between these two characters, as well as a hint of mystery developing. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jess.
DeleteOh, she's still taking her shots at him, sliding them in wherever she can. :-) Good snippet!
ReplyDeleteShe can't help it.
DeleteShe never gives up and she's so clever. terrific snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Charmaine.
DeleteLove the dialogue. On the snarky side.#8sunday
ReplyDeleteThanks, Trin. She is snarky, isn't she?
DeleteNot the world's best dad, apparently. Great to see you yesterday, Di!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy. Great seeing you, too. He isn't quite as bad as the reader has seen.
DeleteThe dialog flows so naturally in this scene, really enjoyed it. Although the two of them are quite oblivious to the foreshadowing the author os carrying out, letting US know something was seriously up with Jack, right? Enjoyed the snippet!
ReplyDeleteYep, you nailed it, Veronica. Thanks.
DeleteGreat snippet! The dialogue feels authentic.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elyzabeth.
DeleteI liked the very believable touch of snark between them.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ed. Snarky is how she runs.
DeleteIs her "pointed look" dagger sharp?
ReplyDeleteThanks for that suggestion, Aurora.
DeleteLove the familiarity of their banter!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Christina. They're reverting back to the old friendship.
DeleteGreat dialogue! :D
ReplyDeleteThanks, Amy.
DeleteNice snippet. Dialogue is great.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elaine.
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