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Sunday, February 25, 2018

#WeWriWa - Jack Leaves Nothing to Chance


Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors where authors share an 8 - 10 sentence snippet. Be sure to visit the other authors. You can find them here

Thanks for all your comments on last week's snippet. I'm sharing a work-in-progress, tentatively titled Unpredictable Nature, a romantic suspense about a woman who doesn't believe her brother's car crash was an accident. 

Suggestions are very welcome. Please excuse the rogue commas.

Today's snippet picks up right after last week's, which ended with “Can’t I visit my kid sister?”
         
Maggie put her hands on her hips and gave him the look that could quell a roomful of high school seniors full of themselves for being on the brink of adulthood and sophomores who were just full of themselves. “When you thought I wasn’t going to be home? Try again, Ace.”
Jack cuffed her around the neck. “Okay, you got me--I wanted to try out a new CD on your system.”
She ducked out from under his arm, then hip bumped him, “The truth comes out.”
His combination Christmas and birthday gift to her a couple of years ago was a sophisticated sound system. After he set it up, he’d left detailed—printed, no less—instructions for its use. That was Jack, always covering the bases--heaven forbid, he leave anything to chance, even his sister’s CD player.





21 comments:

  1. Hmm, I wonder what he wants to listen to. I have a feeling there is more to the story still. Intriguing!

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  2. Their chemistry really comes through, Diane.

    I have you on the linky list now. I have forgotten to sign up so many times... :-)

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  3. Yes heaven forbid. Love the sibling quabble.

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  4. Still wondering why he was so evasive at first. Nice sibling banter with a layer of tension underneath.

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  5. Ugh... my husband does the same. Lovely idea, but sometimes annoying. There are instructions that come with such doo-dads.

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    1. LOL, Sue. Until the grandkids got old enough to turn on the TV, we had to ask son-in-law to write out directions.

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  6. And she believes that? I don't quite think I do. Can't wait to find out if I'm right!

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  7. Like the others, I don't think his explanation is the whole truth and nothing but the truth.

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  8. Well, I still suspect some other ulterior motive but I guess we'll see! For sure I'm hooked though...great snippet!

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    1. That's good. I guess I'll have to skip ahead a bit next week.

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  9. Lol - detailed - printed no less - instructions. Sounds like someone I am married to.
    Great snippet. Glad you made it here this week.
    Tweeted.

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  10. One of those 'gifts' that's really for the giver, I see.

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  11. Hmm, obviously more to this than meets the eye! Great snippet, kept me wanting more!

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  12. lol, I'm not sure she appreciate all the fuse about sounds.

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