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I'm sharing snippets from The Spy: An Outer Rim Novel. It's the 4th book in my series featuring strong women on the frontier of space--the same series as The Pilot, which I've shared for the past several weekends. Because this is a work in progress, any suggestions are greatly appreciated. This is the beginning of the first chapter.
Please excuse the creative punctuation, necessary to keep this within the guidelines.
Genna
Nogaro strode down the corridor of Eleganza Spaceport for the third time in her
life. She hated coming here. In fact, she hated the planet Bricaldia and
everything on it. She felt the same way about her birth planet. Too crowded,
too many people, too much noise.
And
the smells. By the Matriarch, everything stunk like sherd. People might think
the perfume they sprayed on smelled as light as jileena. Instead, combined with
body odor and other obnoxious scents, one whiff of passing travelers hit her as
powerfully as falling into a pile of zircan dung. No essence of jileena could
cover up the odors.
Rookie agent must rescue veteran before his cover is blown.
Genna Nogaro, new to the Coalition of Planets’ Intelligence
Commission, is assigned to bring in an undercover operative in Hallart’s
organization. More experienced agents died before getting him out. Were they
killed by the intergalactic gangster or has the operative gone rogue?
Quintall d’Sernin, con man extraordinaire, infiltrated the
mob and moved up to be the gangster’s right-hand man. Hallart has his tentacles
throughout the Coalition—business, industry, and government. Quin’s finally
worked himself into a valued position. All he needs is the key to mob structure
in order for Coalition forces to take down the entire organization.
Genna will pose as a new recruit to distract Hallart long
enough for Quin to find the key. If they work together, they can accomplish
more. But Quin and Genna’s lives are jeopardized by a mole in the Intelligence
Commission. Will their true roles be revealed before they accomplish their
goal?
Oh my gosh, you made my eyes water with your description of the smell of that place. Well written!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Jess. :)
DeleteDelightful with all the smells etc. You captured the uh fragrance.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Charmaine.
DeleteGood use of the senses, Diane. I'm wondering if it stinks that way to everyone, or if she's especially sensitive to smells. :-)
ReplyDeleteGood point, Teresa.
DeleteI love how you used a bunch of made-up words yet managed to convey a very concrete sense of smell.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ed.
DeleteI guess some things will never change, such as people wearing too much perfume and giving other people migraines! Enjoyed the slice of life look at this character (not that she has a migraine LOL), great snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks for that observation, Veronica. I've sat near people who wore way too much perfume or (men) cologne. I channeled that experience. :)
DeleteI agree with her about too many scents being overpowering. Nice worldbuilding in passing!
ReplyDeleteThank, Aurora. High compliment coming from you who does world-building so well.
DeleteVery powerful use of smell to set the scene -sucked me into the story immediately, but I think I'd prefer to be out and far away from those smells! :)
ReplyDeleteLOL Me, too, Hywela.
DeleteHum, is she really sensitive to smell or is it really this bad. I'm not a fan of crowded place either, hopefully she won't stay there too long.
ReplyDeleteGood point, Linda. I hadn't thought of her being extra-sensitive to smell, but your comment gave me an idea. Thanks.
DeleteWow, I could almost taste that. Definitely not a pleasant time for her.
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