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New month, new book. The snippet this weekend is from my PI mystery, The Case of the Bygone Brother. It's a contemporary cozy that takes place in a small Lake Michigan resort town. Alex (Alexandra) O'Hara has taken over her dad's investigation agency and is struggling to keep it going.
“Hello, gorgeous.”
I whacked my head on the display
shelf. Well, what would you do if you were
lying across the top of a four-drawer lateral file cabinet, and your
arm—yardstick attached—was wedged between the wall and the cabinet, trying to
retrieve the license renewal application that if you mangled, crushed or
couldn’t get would mean the end of your business, and the ex-love-of-your-life
stood in the doorway looking at your butt?
As I wiggled back and sideways
across the long cabinet, I felt my skirt ride up. Of all days to wear a skirt.
With my foot, I searched for the desk chair I’d climbed to get on top of the
cabinet. I’d kicked off my high heels before standing on the chair, probably
the only smart thing I’d done so far.
In that loose-limbed, cocky manner I once thought scary, sexy, and so cool, Nick Palzetti stood in the doorway to the spare office. He even dressed the same in a black leather jacket, black knit shirt, and jeans that molded his hips. Lordy, he could still make my mouth go dry.
“Red panties, you naughty girl.”
Alex O’Hara finally
gets a case that will give her bottom line a much needed boost. She might even
be able to change her diet from ramen noodles to prime rib. All she has to do
is track down a man who’s been missing for over ten years. Piece of cake . . .
until an old flame arrives and a mugger roughs her up with orders to back off.
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Oh, that's such a fun snippet! I love it! And I'd probably bang my head, too. Though, I don't need that situation to do it. I'm clumsy. LOL
ReplyDeleteMe, too, Jess. Alex is a klutz.
DeleteLove this. That's the sort of thing that would happen to me too!
ReplyDeleteLOL, Rachel.
DeleteHow mortifying. Hope they were new red panties.
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DeleteThat last line is outstanding!! lol
ReplyDeleteGreat descriptive writing, Diane. It was easy to visualize the scene. :-)
Thanks, Teresa.
DeleteHilarious! Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Daryl.
DeleteHa! Omg, Diane, what an awesome opening! Love the banter between these two already. Can hardly wait for more! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Julie. More next week.
DeleteLord, this scene is almost like that "naked" dream people talk about. And of course, not only is she wearing a skirt, but red panties. She really needs to think more about her clothing choices in the morning! LOL Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jenna. After this, I think she will.
DeleteHah! That's great. Love the way she thinks.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Angelica.
DeleteYou paint the scene very clearly (and very amusingly!). Fun excerpt, definitely makes me want to read more.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica. I love humor.
DeleteThis made me chuckle. One of THOSE days!
ReplyDeleteLOL
DeleteWhat a wonderfully awkward meeting! Trouble's coming. I can tell.
ReplyDeleteYou got it!
DeleteAwesome snippet, Diane. I am hooked!
ReplyDeleteSuper!
DeleteAwesome snippet, Diane. I am hooked!
ReplyDeleteLOL Great snippet! I'm looking forward to reading more!
ReplyDeleteThat's great, Elyzabeth.
DeleteWhat a laugh! The story sounds fun.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Aurora.
DeleteI love your descriptions. Fab snippet, looking forward to more
ReplyDeleteThanks, Naomi.
DeleteThat's an awkward position she's wedged herself in to. Maybe she should have closed the door and locked it. A gentleman would look away, but this guy clearly isn't that polite!
ReplyDeleteLOL A real gentleman wouldn't have mentioned what he saw.
DeleteWhat a delicious scene! Loved it.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elaine.
DeleteTee hee, love her klutziness. This was a lot of fun to read!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Amy.
DeleteGreat imagery. I bet she's mortified, but he's sure getting a kick out of the situation. lol
ReplyDeleteHe enjoys making her squirm.
DeleteHaha! Loved the snippet! It's always those days when you happen to wear a skirt...
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