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This snippet is from my sci-fi romance, The Protector (An Outer Rim Novel). In last week's snippet, one of Rissa's servers races into the tavern crying that her baby was gone. Rissa gathers some helpers, and they race to spaceport to stop the traffickers from leaving.
They raced to the end of the alley then
casually crossed the street to the alley behind Fortuna’s Pleasure House. As they rounded the
corner of the sand-colored building, they picked up speed then nearly ran over a slight figure
dressed as they were in baggy, multi-pocketed shirts and trousers made of
coarse-spun.
Fortuna kept her voice low, “I can’t
believe this is happening, just as you predicted.”
Rissa slowed down to keep pace with her friend saying, “Seems logical with three kids
missing.”
“Three? I thought only a baby.”
“Two boys are gone, too. Traffickers
are hitting more colonies in this system, so it was bound to happen here.”
“I’d feel better if we had more help--damn those people who didn’t believe you.”
Who knew rescuing two girls from traffickers would bring down a world of hurt?
After tavern owner Rissa Dix rescues two girls from a slave ship, she must rally the townsfolk to prevent traffickers from returning. Mining heir Dillan Rusteran has loved her for years. Little do they know that by rescuing more children they're tangling with a galactic trafficking ring.
You sure have created high stakes for your story!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ed.
DeleteTense scene. And now with it being 3 children - the stakes are through the roof.
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They are indeed and about to get worse. Thanks for tweeting.
DeleteWow, a truly desperate situation going on here. The tension is high! Great snippet...
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica.
DeleteTerrific snip here with danger and decisions made to help others. So fine!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Charmaine.
DeleteThis is a terrible situation. I wonder if they'll manage to save all those children.
ReplyDeleteThey'd better. :)
DeleteIt would be great if the two of them could stop the traffickers, but I have a feeling they are going to need more help. I hope they find it. Great snippet! :)
ReplyDeleteThey'll be picking up more help. Just not who they expected. Stay tune. ;)
DeleteThat should have been "tuned."
DeleteGreat scene, Di! Shades of Joss - rallying the native to take a stand.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy. If the natives won't help themselves, what's the point?
DeleteSounds like a terrible place and time. I hope they find a way to escape and put an end to it.
ReplyDeleteIt used to be such a quiet village.
DeleteI was drawn right in to your scene, Diane. Excellent excerpt.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kim. What a compliment!
DeleteSeems like a "wrong place, wrong time" kind of situation. Awesome snippet, I was pulled right in!
ReplyDeleteThanks, jakerose.
ReplyDeleteI think they do need more help. How do they think they can stop these traffickers? I hope they have a plan with three children at stake. Great, action-packed snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jenna. They do have a plan.
DeleteThis snippet really captures the urgency of the situation!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Christina. That's what I aimed for.
DeleteGreat scene. Shows the urgency of of their situation.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen.
DeleteSome very high stakes, as Ed said!
ReplyDeleteWhat a tragedy for the families involved. I hope they're able to get their kids back!
ReplyDeleteThis is such a desperate situation - you capture the urgency of the situation so well!
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