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I'm sharing snippets from my new release NUMBERS NEVER LIE, a romantic suspense. This snippet comes after last week's when Maggie answered the call from the sheriff.
“I-I can’t believe he’s—”
Drew helped Maggie into a kitchen
chair and forced her head between her knees. Talking to the deputy sheriff
created such pain in his chest Drew feared it might be a heart attack—a tremendous
heartache, instead. No wonder Maggie slid to the floor, ready to pass out, she who
always appeared so confident, strong, capable, now she looked . . . vulnerable.
Maggie sat up, her
expression haunted.
“Take deep breaths, c’mon, Maggie
May.”
He deliberately used her
full name, the way he did when they were kids, knowing she hated to be reminded
that she’d been named after a song. His own breath hitched, he tightened his
jaw and swallowed past the thickening in his throat—his best friend was dead, killed
in a single-car accident near Muskegon in the early hours of Saturday morning--while he groused about the inconveniences of primitive camping, Jack lay
dead. Thrown from his SUV that had rolled down a river embankment, undiscovered
until late morning, after the fog burned off.
Blurb:
A shocking secret brings danger to Jack Sinclair and his sister Maggie.
As kids, they were the fearless threesome. As adults, Jack's an accountant; Drew, a lawyer; Maggie, a teacher and camping troop leader. Returning from a weekend camping trip, Maggie receives horrifying news. She refuses to believe her brother’s fatal car crash was an accident. If the police won’t investigate, she’ll do it herself. Convincing Drew Campbell to help is her only recourse.
Drew Campbell was too busy to return his best friend’s phone call. Too busy to attend a camping meeting important to his teen daughter. Too busy to stay in touch with Jack. Logic and reason indicate Jack’s accident was just that--an accident caused by fatigue and fog. Prodded by guilt, he’ll help Maggie even if he thinks she’s wrong.
A break-in at Jack’s condo convinces Maggie she’s right. Then her home is searched. What did Jack do that puts Maggie in danger?
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I like the description of Maggie's reaction to the news, and "grouse" is such a great verb!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Priscilla. I grouse a lot some days. LOL
DeleteThat is such hard news to deal with. At least neither of them are alone at this time. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jess. I imagined Maggie alone and thought no way. Drew had to be with her.
DeleteIt sounds like as soon as she recovers some, he'll need her to comfort him.
ReplyDeleteHe does. But, typical guy he won't ask.
DeleteReally points out how death makes everything else trivial.
ReplyDeleteYou did an incredible job writing this scene. Visual. Emotional--in a weird way, as if I was numbed by the news as well.
Wow, Teresa. thanks so much for sharing that.
DeleteSuch heartache for both of them. Very emotional scene and you've painted their anguish beautifully.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Jenna. A writer never knows until readers tell her the impact of a scene.
DeleteThat's a powerful scene, lots of emotion! Good snippet
ReplyDeleteThanks, Brittany.
DeleteDramatic scene with tender care and awful tragedy.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Aurora. Although I've lost family members, it was expected--age, deteriorating health. Never to an accident. Thanks for saying I got the emotions right.
DeleteA powerful scene indeed, lots of emotion. I hope the book is doing really well!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica. I hope so, too.
DeleteLots of emotion here. Very dramatic.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elaine.
DeleteWhat a strong heartbreaking scene, Di! You can feel their pain and loss.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy. Great praise coming from you.
DeleteMarvelous scene, Diane. I felt this in my heart.
ReplyDeleteWow. Thanks, Charmaine.
DeleteGreat use of emotion and feeling in this scene!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Amy.
DeleteThat's quite a thought to have. I imagine it will haunt him for some time. o.O
ReplyDeleteIt will. Both of them will have regrets.
DeleteVery touching scene - and thank goodness they were together, how awful to have been alone and receive such news!
ReplyDeleteThis is very intense and heartbreaking. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteYou really nailed the intensity and shock of receiving news like that. Powerful scene.
ReplyDeleteI can feel their pain here. Great excerpt!
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