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I'm sharing snippets from a new story, The Pilot: An Outer Rim Novel.
Please excuse the creative punctuation, necessary to keep this within the guidelines. It's also edited a little from the original.
“Cargo transport, this is Coalition Security, are you in need of
assistance?”
Celara d’Enfaden raced up
the vertical ladder from the hold, leapt across a corner of the open hole in
the cabin floor then, reaching under the cabinet above the aft bunk, she hit
the switches that closed the hatch and started the exhaust fan. Finally, she
whipped off her protective mask only to gag at the residual stench from the
cargo. She took one look at the perma-film viewscreen across the bow of her
starship, and her heart stopped.
A Volpian cruiser nearly
filled the screen. After the first hail in Universal, the deep male voice
repeated the offer in different languages, even Menacan, Celera’s first
language.
“Arjay,” she called, “we’ve
got company.”
There's no place like home and he
stole hers.
Life on the frontier of space is hard enough so when pirates stole
Celara d'Enfaden's cargo, she vowed not to be tricked again. Determined to make
an example out of indie pilots who disobey orders, Coalition Administrator
Trevarr Jovano impounds Celara’s starship and cargo. If he backs down, he’ll
lose respect. If she can’t deliver her cargo, she’ll default on her loan and
lose her only home—her ship. More important than her ship, though, is her
brother. To rescue him from a galactic gangster, she’ll even work with Jovano
who is bent on avenging his wife’s murder.
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Hmm. Is the cruiser friend or foe? It'll be interesting to find out.
ReplyDeleteYep, very interesting.
DeleteAnother exciting snippet for all of us to work it out. Thanks, Diane.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Charmaine. I like to start stories right in the middle of the action.
DeleteNow I remember how much I loved this book! Happy Mom's Day, Di!!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy. Back at ya!
DeleteDramatic and involving right from the first few words! Great snippet...
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica.
DeleteSounds like a complicated plot and certainly a dramatic beginning.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Aurora.
DeleteSuch an intense snippet! Definitely pulled me in.
ReplyDeleteThat's great, Jess. Thanks.
DeleteGreat description in this excerpt!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kate.
DeleteIs this a friend or someone to fear. I'm curious to know. Great scene!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen.
DeleteExciting start! I've got a bad feeling about that cruiser.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Alexis.
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