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I'm continuing with a snippet from my PI mystery, The Case of the Bygone Brother, a contemporary cozy, that takes place in a small Lake Michigan resort town. Alex (Alexandra) O'Hara has taken over her dad's investigation agency, struggling to keep it going. In this snippet, Alex and Nick are surveilling Mr. Yoder's activities, with Alex peeking in the basement window.
While I gaped at the sight in the basement, the back door opened and a woman said, “Hurry up, Killer, do your
business and get back in here.”
Killer? Time to make tracks before
some monster dog discovered a trespasser. I slowly straightened, keeping my
back to the wall, and edged behind the bushes—without making noise or quick
motions. As I put my toe into the fence link, vicious barking close by—real
close by—spurred me up, then Killer grabbed the hem of my jeans.
As the dog tugged, Nick grabbed the
back of my sweatshirt and started to haul me over. The bent tops of the chain
links dug into my stomach. Killer hung on a moment longer then landed with a
whimper before baying like a hound who’d treed his prey, while I lost my
balance and landed on top of Nick—just like that time in the office.
“We have to stop meeting like
this,” he whispered.
Alex O’Hara finally gets a case that will give her bottom line a much needed boost. She might even be able to change her diet from ramen noodles to prime rib. All she has to do is track down a man who’s been missing for over ten years. Piece of cake . . . until an old flame arrives and a mugger roughs her up with orders to back off.
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Okay, I'm extremely curious as to what was going on in the basement. And the last line was very humorous. I must read this book! :)
ReplyDeleteOh, good. :)
DeleteSo you have multiple 'meet cutes' in this book? Is that legal? ;-)
ReplyDeleteOf course, Ed. Anything goes!
DeleteOK, Diane, I am DYING to know what is in that basement! And Nick sounds like just the kind of man to have around in a pinch!
ReplyDeleteOK, Diane, I am DYING to know what is in that basement! And Nick sounds like just the kind of man to have around in a pinch!
ReplyDeleteNick's great. No surprise there. The surprise comes later. :-O
DeleteTerrific. Love the description and then the punch line.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Charmaine.
DeleteCute. Love the way she lands on top of him. Glad the spikes in the chain link were bent over. That could have caused some serious injury.
ReplyDeleteSure could, Cara.
DeleteWhoa. Didn't see that coming. Great set up.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Angelica.
DeleteOooo what are they going to find?
ReplyDeleteNot tellin', Amy. :)
DeleteLove it!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Maureen.
DeleteAnother great 8 sentences!
ReplyDeleteGood luck and God's blessings Diane
PamT
Thanks, Pam.
DeleteFun little moment! I was waiting for Killer to be this tiny teacup size of a dog...I like this story a LOT.
ReplyDeleteWe-ll, since Killer doesn't show up again...he's a cross between a rag mop and a small beagle. Thanks, Veronica.
DeleteWhat fun! Good thing she has Nick to catch her.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Aurora.
DeleteLOL! I can always picture your scenes so clearly. I was expecting Killer to be a Chihuahua.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy. Appreciate hearing that.
DeleteActually, we have a dachshund named Rudi at our house, but when the doorbell rings and we aren't expecting anybody, and Rudi is barking her little head off, I say "Down, Killer," in a loud command voice before I answer the door.
ReplyDeleteI think it's Freudian that Alex constantly finds herself on top of Nick...
It gets better. ;)
Deletecrisp, clean and curiosity-raising! Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Susan. What a great comment.
DeleteIt's not an easy life, being a private investigator! Glad Nick was there (again) to catch her. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteNot easy at all. ;-)
DeleteVery exciting! And funny at the end.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Christina.
DeleteExcellent showcase of the humor and the suspense in this book. Great job! Love this story. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Alicia. As the editor, you should know. :)
Delete*grins* I hope they don't ever stop meeting like this. Such a fun excerpt, Diane! I'm loving this story!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Julie. Oh, yeah. They keep having these "moments" even in the next book.
DeleteDanger and humor all rolled into one. Enjoyed the snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen.
DeleteFor a second, I thought Killer was going to be a tiny yappy dog. But that doesn't sound like a little dog at all! That was a narrow escape.
ReplyDeleteSounds like everybody thought the same about the dog. No surprise. Maybe I should have made Killer a big dog. LOL
DeleteI wonder what was in that basement. Doesn't sound like anything good.
ReplyDeleteThat last line though... lol
Thanks, Aldrea.
DeleteClassic line - perfectly played. Great job. Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Victoria.
DeleteExciting and sexy- classic PI shenanigans. Can't wait to read more.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Alexis.
DeleteThis made me smile. I want to learn about killer. Great snippet
ReplyDeleteThanks, Naomi.
DeleteInteresting and intriguing...whats next? Awesome excerpt.
ReplyDeleteLove his sense of humor! And what kind of dog was Killer? 'm imagining all sorts of things! :)
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