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This snippet is from my sci-fi romance, The Protector (An Outer Rim Novel). In last week's snippet, Rissa surprised two slavers, each carrying a child back to the spaceport.
“Set the children on the floor then
clasp your hands behind your heads,” Rissa had set the pistol on stun, but as
far as they knew, she could easily vaporize them. Before she could call Kiran to take the children, hard metal pressed against the back of her neck.
“Not so fast, drop your weapon.”
Rissa froze at the familiar male voice
behind her, but considering the number of people—miners, pilots, freighter
crews—that came through her tavern, she had a hard time placing the man. When he
yanked off her hood, the cold metal jammed into her neck as he said, “Who do
we have here?”
The two men spun around, and one exclaimed, “Stars, Captain, are we glad to see you. Hey, it’s the fem from
the tavern.”
“Take her
pistol then take those kids inside the ship. We gotta get outa here. We’ll take
her with us and dump her out the airlock.”
As always, apologies for the creative punctuation, which was done to keep within the sentence limit.
Who knew rescuing two girls from traffickers would bring down a world of hurt?
After tavern owner Rissa Dix rescues two girls from a slave ship, she must rally the townsfolk to prevent traffickers from returning. Mining heir Dillan Rusteran has loved her for years. Little do they know that by rescuing more children they're tangling with a galactic trafficking ring.
Hah! Nasty place to stop, leaving us gasping for more.
ReplyDeleteHehehe.
DeleteIt's getting dangerous!
ReplyDeleteYep.
DeleteWHOA I was NOT expecting that!
ReplyDeleteUh oh! That's not good. There's someone else to help them nearby, right? I hope! Great snippet! :)
ReplyDeleteThis is going from bad to worse very quickly. I hope she remembers this guy, and figures out how to outsmart him--fast! Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteOh, I also came across the issue of using creative punctuation in my snippet and I only started, lol. I might say, set the girls down. I like the authority and tone in the writing. Shows whose in control.
ReplyDeleteOoh she's in deep trouble now! I wonder how she's going to get out of this one!
ReplyDeleteDeep trouble so now what? Terrific snip, Diane.
ReplyDeleteSo that's the thanks she gets! Some rescue. Thanks for hosting my books with bite on sale tour, Di!!
ReplyDeleteUh oh, some serious problems for her now! A very exciting cliffhanger going on with this snippet....
ReplyDeleteKiran will come to her rescue, right?
ReplyDeleteWhat an exciting tale- love the way you're ramping up the stakes throughout!
ReplyDeleteEeek, such a tense moment!
ReplyDeleteCan we throw *them* out the airlock? They deserve it. She could use some help right about now! Suspenseful snippet!
ReplyDeleteOh he sounds just wonderful and I mean that sarcastically. Throw her out the airlock. I do hope he gets what he deserves.
ReplyDeleteAnd then what happens!? I hope you continue this snippet this Sunday!
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