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Last week, I shared my tale of woe regarding my laptop. It got worse. Fortunately, the Geek Squad retrieved all my files. Whew! Unfortunately, the computer kept up a series of problems. After taking it back two more times, the GS guy said it would cost more to fix than buying a new computer. Yikes! Not in my budget. My own Geek guy offered to open the unit. Couldn't make it worse, I thought. Hubs got it open, and it stayed open. Whew, whew!! Knocking wood that I can limp on until I sell more books to pay for a new laptop. That ought to be in about 2020.
I'm sharing another new snippet from my sci-fi romance The Protector. Last week, Rissa's bartender rescued her from the slavers. I'm skipping ahead a bit. Rissa and her friends are rescuing the children from the slave ship berthed in the spaceport. Finally, we meet the hero, Dillan. He was awakened by the noise and someone bumping into his ship.
Dillan Rusteran jerked upright in the
large bed aboard his Volpian Caravel, and it took a moment to orient himself. After three
tendays in space, he found it strange for his transport to be stationary. He
listened intently for a repeat of what had startled him out of a deep sleep. He
knew every normal sound of his ship . . . and that wasn’t one of
them.
Staying to the left of the viewport, he peered out, and what he saw explained the bump that had awakened him. Hooded
thieves were breaking into the hold of a cargo transport.
Using his wrist comm, he called the traffic
controller, “Ropergor, call Security, someone’s breaking into the cargo hauler
in the next berth.”
After a long pause, the traffic
controller answered, “Thank you, sir, I’m on it.”
Something in Ropergor’s voice didn’t
sound right. During the six years since Dillan had been in Astron Colony, he’d
learned a lot about body language and voice inflections—necessary tools for an
executive in his father’s business—Ropergor was frightened.
Though the thieves had been careless in
bumping against his ship, he was certain the six he saw would make off with his
neighbor’s cargo before Security arrived.
That didn’t bother him as much as the
fear that his ship might be their next target.
Apologies for the creative punctuation, which was done to keep within the sentence limit.
Who knew rescuing two girls from traffickers would bring down a world of hurt?
After tavern owner Rissa Dix rescues two girls from a slave ship, she must rally the townsfolk to prevent traffickers from returning. Mining heir Dillan Rusteran has loved her for years. Little do they know that by rescuing more children they're tangling with a galactic trafficking ring.
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Uh oh! Not a good situation, though I have a feeling Dillan is going to do something about it.
ReplyDeleteWell, I'm glad you were able to get your files and have something to work on for now. Technology is such a pain sometimes.
Glad geek squad was able to help you out. Loved the hooded thieves in this snippet. Reminded me of the protest gone wild in London a few years back and sort of the music video, Alone by Alan Walker. #wewriwa
ReplyDeleteI'm guessing these are the slavers, right? Otherwise why would Ropergor be so frightened?
ReplyDeleteUh-oh, why is Ropergor frightened? Glad you were able to sort out your computer problems!
ReplyDeleteThat's the key to this snip-he senses fear in Ropergor. Outstanding!
ReplyDeleteThat's an interesting twist to the plot, nice to meet the hero. Great snippet! And i'm sorry to hear about your computer problems - I live in fear of mine crashing!
ReplyDeleteI can feel the tension rising into an action scene!
ReplyDeleteLove this whole scene!
ReplyDeleteGood instincts! I hope he can save himself.
ReplyDeleteWait, is Rissa one of the hooded thieves? Dillan might have just made things worse...
ReplyDeleteI love the comments (as always). It's so interesting to see everyone's guesses as to where the snippet is going. Hint: Andrea is on the right track.
ReplyDeleteSomething is amiss. Dillian better listen to that warning voice in his head!
ReplyDeleteHope he goes with his instincts.
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I love how you use the tone of his voice to give insight into what's happening with the ship. Very nicely written! Sorry about your laptop woes. I hope your current one stays alive and kicking for as long as possible!
ReplyDeleteThat can't be good, but I have confidence that Dillan will do something about it. :) Tense scene.
ReplyDeleteGreat comments, folks. Thanks so much for stopping by.
ReplyDeleteI learn so much about Dillan in this snippet along with the rapidly building tension. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteHe should definitely go investigate, try and stop the thieves. That cargo could use some help!
ReplyDeleteSending good tech thoughts your way.
Oh, I hate computer problems soooo much! Glad you were able to work something out. Really enjoyed the snippet.
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