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Thanks to everyone who visited last week. I'm sharing snippets from The Pilot: An Outer Rim Novel. It's the 1st book in a series featuring strong women on the frontier of space. Celara's ship was hailed by one claiming to be Coalition Security. In this snippet, we're on the other ship with Trevarr and his buddy Laning.
Please excuse the creative punctuation, necessary to keep this within the guidelines. It's also edited a little from the original.
“Just like old times, hey,
Trev, you and me together again—I’ve missed ya, buddy.”
Trevarr would never admit
how much he missed his friend. As a child, he had learned that expressing emotions
was improper behavior for the heir to a political dynasty.
He dodged a rock the size of
the presidential residence on Bricaldia, “Your new ship has the maneuverability
of a house. I wish we had my Agilean.”
“If we were in your ship,
you would never have entered this asteroid field. Do you want me to fire again
on that—
“Yes, fire another round. But
try not to destroy that ship under a hail of rock.”
Laning grinned, “That would
certainly get his attention.”
There's no place like home and he stole hers.
Life on the frontier of space is hard enough so when pirates stole Celara d'Enfaden's cargo, she vowed not to be tricked again.
Determined to make an example out of indie pilots who disobey orders, Coalition Administrator Trevarr Jovano impounds Celara’s starship and cargo. If he backs down, he’ll lose respect. If she can’t deliver her cargo, she’ll default on her loan and lose her only home—her ship.
More important than her ship, though, is her brother. To rescue him from a galactic gangster, she’ll even work with Jovano who is bent on avenging his wife’s murder.
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Diane, I always enjoy your snippets. Keep them coming, my friend.
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DeleteI admire the way you tightly weave the events and provide many possible outcomes, Diane. I always find this difficult 🌹
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DeleteYou've woven back story really well into this action scene!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jess. Always good to hear that.
DeleteAttention-grabbing, interesting dialogue.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ed.
DeleteMore action and clever banter - enjoyed the snippet! This seems to be quite a fun story...
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica. I'm enjoying reading it again and remembering how much fun it was to write.
DeleteIntriguing, although they don't seem worried about the people in the ship they're firing on.
ReplyDeleteThey are deliberately missing--shooting across the bow to make the ship stop. Trevarr is single-minded about the pilot obeying his order.
DeleteReally enjoyed the snippet, and the action and banter between these two!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Hywela. Glad I got the balance right.
DeleteHaha Love that last line. It made me smile.
ReplyDeleteGood. That's the reaction I hoped for. Thanks, Amy.
DeleteI like how they assume they're dealing with a man in the other ship. :-)
ReplyDeletelol Typical guy. Thanks Teresa.
DeleteFun snippet. I enjoyed the banter and the hint at backstory.
ReplyDeleteI love their banter. I chuckled when I read the last few lines. :) Yes, it would definitely grab their attention.
ReplyDeleteGood dialogue and a fun snippet.
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