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I'm sharing snippets from The Pilot: An Outer Rim Novel. It's the 1st book in a series featuring strong women on the frontier of space. Celara's ship was hailed by one claiming to be Coalition Security. In this snippet, we're still with Trevarr and his buddy Laning in their ship, and Celara is long gone.
Please excuse the creative punctuation, necessary to keep this within the guidelines. It's also edited a little from the original.
“Looks like the damage is
superficial,” Laning grudgingly admitted after they finished running
diagnostics, “No thanks to you. What in Lexol’s Fire has gotten into you? This
trip was supposed to be a little run around this region to see what my new ship
could do—my ship that’s so new the paint isn’t dry—my new ship that is now dented and scraped,” Laning rarely lost his
temper, but he was in fine form now, “You damn-near got us killed. I’m too
young to die and so are you.”
Technically, he could have
Laning disciplined for insubordination, but his anger over losing his quarry
paled next to his anger at himself for his recklessness, “We could have caught
that hauler.”
“By claiming to be disabled?
Have you forgotten distress signals are taken very seriously, especially out
here? Word gets around about sending a false distress signal and you can kiss
off ever getting rescued when you need it.”
“I wanted that ship—the
pilot needs to be taught to heed orders.”
“At what cost—by lying? Or
does the end justify the means?”
There's no place like home and he stole hers.
Life on the frontier of space is hard enough so when pirates stole Celara d'Enfaden's cargo, she vowed not to be tricked again.
Determined to make an example out of indie pilots who disobey orders, Coalition Administrator Trevarr Jovano impounds Celara’s starship and cargo. If he backs down, he’ll lose respect. If she can’t deliver her cargo, she’ll default on her loan and lose her only home—her ship.
More important than her ship, though, is her brother. To rescue him from a galactic gangster, she’ll even work with Jovano who is bent on avenging his wife’s murder.
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Just love this, wondering what happens next, Diane 🤭
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteAn irresistible challenge. Love it.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy.
DeleteThey both have different priorities. Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jess. Trevarr is single-minded regarding those who break the law.
DeleteAnd so they move along, almost hiding feelings!
ReplyDeleteAlmost, Charmaine, almost.
DeleteFrom his attitude and actions . . . yes the end does justify the means.
ReplyDeleteYep. But he's going to have to rethink his priorities. Soon.
DeleteHe's pretty stubborn and probably for the wrong reasons.
ReplyDeleteYou nailed it, Aurora.
DeleteInteresting discussion between them and very good points being raised. And another dilemma on the horizon no doubt! Good tension - really enjoyed the excerpt.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica. I hoped the difference between the 2 friends comes through.
DeleteGood thing he's got a friend to bring him back from the brink. Hope he listens.
ReplyDeleteHe'd better. Or he's going to have lots of problems.
DeleteGreat exchange here! I love the tension in this scene. Very nicely written, Diane! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Julie.
DeleteLanning definitely has the upper hand in this argument. Rarely do the ends justify the means and when they do, it's usually at great cost. Great dialogue and snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jenna. You are so right.
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ReplyDeleteOh the tension between these two is palpable - and I reckon it's worse because he knows Laning is right. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteYou are so right, Hywela. Thanks.
DeleteLove the interaction between them.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elaine.
DeleteFalse distress signals doesn't sound like the best way to teach someone a lesson! I'd be pretty peeved, too!
ReplyDeleteThat's right, Emily.
DeleteThis is such a great scene! It really shows their relationship and it also shows a lot about Trevarr's character. lol He wanted that hauler!!
ReplyDeleteGood book!
Great scene. I loved the tension between Trevarr and Laning.
ReplyDeleteGreat exchange here in this tension filled scene!
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