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My snippet is from my upcoming release, THE CASE OF THE MEDDLING MAMA, an Alex O'Hara Novel, third in my PI mystery series. Along with some creative punctuation, it hasn't been edited yet, so suggestions are welcome.
This snippet comes immediately after last week's. The ending of which said Nick had disappeared on their wedding night.
When Nick showed up two and a half
months later, I had second thoughts about being married to him. If his job took
him away at the drop of a hat, he could leave any time, even if he did come
back. But when a guy leaves you on your wedding night with no warning, no word
for nearly three months, wouldn’t you have reservations?
We were just starting to hash
things out when his mother showed up last week, declaring she’d left his father
and was bunking in with me until she found an apartment. What could I say, no?
I don’t think so.
I was still in a state of shock, so
was Nick, who’d moved into the B&B owned by the biggest blabbermouth in the
county because I wouldn’t sleep with him while his mother slept in the next
room. Two days later, his agency sent him off on another mission—typical. We
needed to talk, but how could we if he wasn’t around? See what I mean about
reservations?
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I totally understand why she has reservations. I've loved the excerpts so far, and pre-ordered. Can't wait to read it! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jess. I hope you enjoy it.
DeleteThis sounds like a horrendous tragedy ... or a rollicking comedy!
ReplyDeleteI guess it could be either. I'm shooting for the latter...mostly.
DeleteThe poor woman. She has a lot going on.
ReplyDeleteIt get worse, Cara.
DeleteI love the tone of this, Diane. Like Ed said, it has elements of misery and hilarity all intertwined
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad to hear that. Thanks, Kim.
DeleteThey need to make reservations someplace away from meddling folk and work on their problems! But that would make for a short story, not a fun book!
ReplyDeleteThat it would, Nancy. Every time she wants to talk, his job calls him away. Not good.
DeleteOh yikes, that marriage has some issues.
ReplyDeleteTweeted.
Thanks, Daryl.
DeleteWhat in the world is going on here? Get home right now and be a husband. Get the Mom a different place!
ReplyDeleteLOL, Charmaine. That would end the story real quick.
DeleteThis is a challenging situation definitely. Sounds like she needs to schedule a honeymoon so she can be alone with her husband.
ReplyDeleteThat's what they need, Christina. A honeymoon.
DeleteNick's job is a definite problem all right! Did they have the same issues when they were dating or is this a new wrinkle? Enjoyed the snippet though, glad it's your character, not me with these challenges LOL.
ReplyDeleteNot me, either, Veronica. I'd kick his butt out and change the locks.
DeleteThis seems like desertion. If my husband had left on our wedding night with no explanation, when he showed back up it would be to sign divorce papers! She's got quite a problem that I hope he comes back to fix!
ReplyDeleteLOL at your solution to his return, Jenna. He'd better fix things right away.
DeleteIt doesn't seem much of a marriage.
ReplyDeleteNot my idea of a perfect marriage.
DeleteShe is in quandary! hope there's a whole lot more to his leaving than how it appears right now. :-)
ReplyDeleteHehehe.
DeleteI can't say I envy her situation. Wonder how she'll work it out? :)
ReplyDeleteShe does have problems, doesn't she???
DeleteLove the light, bouncy feel of her thoughts.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kimberly. That's what I'm going for.
DeleteWow, I'd have more than a few reservations. It's hard to "stand by your man" when he's racing through the door. lol
ReplyDeleteOooh, great line.
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