Thanks to everyone who visited last week.
I'm sharing snippets from The Spy: An Outer Rim Novel. It's the 4th book in my series featuring strong women on the frontier of space. Because this is a work in progress, any suggestions are greatly appreciated. I'm continuing where I left off last week with Genna in a taxi with an inquisitive driver.
Please excuse the creative punctuation, necessary to keep this within the guidelines.
“Maybe
you’d like me to drop you at a hotel first,” He was a persistent one, “They
don’t allow totes as big as yours into the museum.”
If
she hadn’t needed the tote’s contents for disguises, she would’ve left it
aboard her ship, but it gave her the appearance of a tourist. Since she wasn’t
staying long enough to need a hotel, she demurred, “I’m heading out to the
rainforest this afternoon.”
She
caught the reflection of Bricaldia’s sun on the Coalition of Planets Hall of
Representatives. The magnificent building looked like it was made entirely of
glass, an illusion that all transactions there were transparent, and if she
believed that she could be the proud owner of lake-front property in the Astron
Desert.
As
the conveyance descended, he proclaimed, “Here we are—isn’t that a fabulous
site?” He waved at the Hall of Reps, “I could take you out to your hotel in the
‘forest after the city tour.”
Always
an entrepreneur.
“I
will consider that,” She used her fake ID card to pay for the ride, relieved to
get away from the chatty driver.
She
had one leg on the walkway when he leaned out his open window and handed her a card
half the size of her ID, “If you finish your business early and want a ride
anywhere during your vacation, comm me.”
“Right,”
She didn’t refuse the card--let him think his tactic worked.
Rookie agent must rescue veteran before his cover is blown.
Genna Nogaro, new to the Coalition of Planets’ Intelligence Commission, is assigned to bring in an undercover operative in Hallart’s organization. More experienced agents died before getting him out. Were they killed by the intergalactic gangster or has the operative gone rogue?
Quintall d’Sernin, con man extraordinaire, infiltrated the mob and moved up to be the gangster’s right-hand man. Hallart has his tentacles throughout the Coalition—business, industry, and government. Quin’s finally worked himself into a valued position. All he needs is the key to mob structure in order for Coalition forces to take down the entire organization.
Genna will pose as a new recruit to distract Hallart long enough for Quin to find the key. If they work together, they can accomplish more. But Quin and Genna’s lives are jeopardized by a mole in the Intelligence Commission. Will their true roles be revealed before they accomplish their goal?
I suspect the persistent driver will play a role later on, but you've got me wondering what role.
ReplyDeleteYou're just too smart, Ed.
DeleteSquee! I can't wait to read all of it!! You've sucked me right in with these few sentences.
ReplyDeleteGreat! I have got to finish this book.
DeleteI'm with Ed. I'm quite certain we'll be seeing this character again. Chatty people never go away lol. Great scene, Diane! Happy writing and see you in 2020! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Julie. You are so right about chatty people. I think they start as kids talking & following mom into the bathroom.
DeletePersistence must be his middle name! I'm with the other comnmenters, have a feeling we'll be seeing this person again in the book...he seems to insistent not to have more of a part to play. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica. You guys are just too smart. lol
DeleteYeah, he's way too interested in her. Love the description of the sun on the glass building.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Alexis. Politics as usual, even in the future.
DeleteOkay - he's persistent. But is it for the credits or is he trying to send her a different message?
ReplyDeleteMaybe. You never know, even Genna doesn't.
DeleteHe's definitely persistent. I wonder if it will pay off later in the story.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad my snippet makes readers ask questions.
DeleteHe certainly seems mysterious. Whether he's good or bad we'll soon see.
ReplyDeleteYes, we will, Elaine. :)
DeleteI'm getting a very bad vibe from this guy. I wonder if this is the last she sees of him. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteShe certainly hopes so. Thanks, Jenna.
DeleteThat description of the building was delightful, always scammers around. And I'm trusting the driver less and less.
ReplyDeleteThe cabbie is a very interesting chap, also a wonderful tool to advance the story. I expect he will make a reappearance as well.
ReplyDeleteAlways interesting, Diane. More, thats what I want is more.
ReplyDeleteCharmaine here. My daughter jumped in and I don't have a clue
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