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I'm sharing snippets from The Spy: An Outer Rim Novel. It's the 4th book in my series featuring strong women on the frontier of space.
Because this is a work in progress, suggestions are greatly appreciated. Genna is in Commission Vorinda's office while d'Sernin's handler reports.
Please excuse the creative punctuation, necessary to keep this within the guidelines.
Vorinda
glared at the handler, “Tell me about the rumors regarding d’Sernin.”
After
fumbling with the plexi-sheet, he said, “Two years in a Menacan penitentiary,
theft and conducting confidence schemes.”
“Yes,
yes, what else?”
D’Sernin
was a con man? That made sense—being a confidence man would
help undercover work. Genna raised her eyebrow, not that either man looked at
her—they stared at each other in a classic pissing match.
“Another
year in a penal colony on Marin 5,” he went on, though not quite as bold as
before, “That time for killing two men. He, along with several others, escaped
in the most brazen breakout in Coalition history—he’s still wanted for that,” the
handler rubbed his sweaty upper lip then looked like he was gathering up his
gumption, “Sir, with his record, I do not understand why he was ever hired.”
“That’s
enough,” Vorinda’s voice came out hard and sharp, like a dagger ready to plunge
into an opponent’s jugular.
By
the Matriarch, the commissioner was going to explode like the volcano on
Traish, the one everyone thought was extinct.
Rookie agent must rescue veteran before his cover is blown.
Genna Nogaro, new to the Coalition of Planets’ Intelligence Commission, is assigned to bring in an undercover operative in Hallart’s organization. More experienced agents died before getting him out. Were they killed by the intergalactic gangster or has the operative gone rogue?
Quintall d’Sernin, con man extraordinaire, infiltrated the mob and moved up to be the gangster’s right-hand man. Hallart has his tentacles throughout the Coalition—business, industry, and government. Quin’s finally worked himself into a valued position. All he needs is the key to mob structure in order for Coalition forces to take down the entire organization.
Genna will pose as a new recruit to distract Hallart long enough for Quin to find the key. If they work together, they can accomplish more. But Quin and Genna’s lives are jeopardized by a mole in the Intelligence Commission. Will their true roles be revealed before they accomplish their goal?
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Wow. Vorinda's not having it--any of it. The intensity of this scene comes through loud and clear. :-)
ReplyDeleteHope all is well in your neck of the woods, Diane. :-)
I'm glad that did. I cut some for this snippet and wondered if I cut too much. Thanks. We're okay here. Staying at home is getting old.
DeleteJust like the volcano, it sounds like there is a lot of information being hidden here. Lots of tension!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jess.
DeleteWOW! Diane, you cooked up a hot scene. Outstanding snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Charmaine.
DeleteGreat build up. Ready for the lava flow!!
ReplyDeleteLOL Next week.
DeleteGreat build up of tension, as well as giving us background on what's sure to be very interesting character!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Alexis.
DeleteHis record is terrible, but how much was set up for his covert activities?
ReplyDeleteCan't put anything over on you, Aurora. LOL
DeleteWith everything she learns, I feel more and more certain she's being set up to fail.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ed. You are very observant.
DeleteI like how the body language complemented the conversation. It gave a very clear picture, and I could visually picture them talking.
ReplyDeleteKeep smiling,
Yawatta
Thanks, Yawatta.
DeleteNice scene. This guy sounds pretty hard to find.
ReplyDeleteYou bet, Elaine. She's going to have to work hard.
DeleteThe tension definitely comes through in the narrative...and I'm finding his background really fascinating. Can't wait to 'meet' this character!
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