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Sorry for missing last weekend. I'm sharing snippets from The Spy: An Outer Rim Novel. It's the 4th book in my series featuring strong women on the frontier of space.
Because this is a work in progress, suggestions are greatly appreciated. I've skipped a few paragraphs ahead. Genna left the Chellian driver at the restaurant and walked to spaceport.
As
soon as Genna entered the cockpit of Ian Tamerly’s luxury space yacht, she tossed
the tote and wig on the empty copilot’s seat. She ran her fingers through her
hair and massaged her scalp. Stars, she hated wigs. Space Flight Control
informed her she was fifth in line to depart. Plenty of time for routine
checks. Within mins, she verified the mech Ian had recommended to get her ship
ready had been as diligent as he’d said.
Without
a good recommendation, no way was she letting an imbecile touch the spacecraft
she’d borrowed. While Ian hadn’t been concerned about his ship, Genna would
rather not owe him more than borrowing. She knew he wanted their relationship
to progress beyond friends. She wasn’t ready for that.
Here's a little more.
Ian
Tamerly was handsome, rich, a powerful force in the Central District. Unfortunately,
she wasn’t attracted to him. Not like she’d been with Laning Servary. Ian’s attraction
gave her ego a boost after Servary had stomped on it. Damn that man. He’d
spoiled her for all men.
But
not for that Chellian driver. Somehow, he oozed sensuality. She didn’t like short
men. They used their overinflated ego to make up for a lack of height, boasting
and posturing like a turken rooster. Still, that man sent shivers through her
when he touched or peered at her with his golden eyes. He was a man she could—
“TAM-247765,
you are next in line for liftoff.”
I love the way you deal with whats happening. Good job, my friend.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Charmaine.
DeleteI really like the way the control tower interrupted her thoughts! Reality. :-) Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteWrite faster, please. I am looking forward to this story!
Thanks, Teresa, for spurring me on.
DeleteI hope thoughts of these men don't distract her too much during this mission. Though I have a feeling she'll see at least one of them again.
ReplyDeleteMaybe she'll see all 3. LOL She's allowed a little daydreaming while waiting to leave. Or would she???
DeleteI so enjoy being carried along in your scenes like a passenger. I can't wait for this adventure to begin . . . I'm certain with a surprise for her.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy. Your encouragement means a lot.
DeleteShould she be daydreaming right before takeoff?
ReplyDeleteNeat backstory. Pity she didn't take to the owner of the luxury space yacht.
No, she shouldn't be daydreaming. Yeah, Ian has everything--money, power; he's good looking and he's tall. What more could she want???
DeleteOh my, her thoughts are wandering in all directions, aren't they? Yeah, she's definitely got to get her head into the game as far as her actual mission goes! Enjoyed the snippet...
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica. You & the others convinced me to make a few changes here. She should be thinking about the mission right now.
DeleteI'm sorry to see the garrulous drive go, though I'm sure he'll be back.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ed. He was so much fun to write.
DeleteSeems like she is also breaking hearts around the galaxy. I enjoyed following her wandering mind. Great job inserting reality into the daydreams!
ReplyDeleteLOL Thanks, Brittany.
DeleteShe's got a lot on her mind for sure. Hoping to see more of the driver!
ReplyDeleteShe does, Kate.
DeleteEnjoyed the post. She does seem all over the place. It probably isn't a good idea that she's daydreaming. :)
ReplyDeleteYou are right, Karen. She should pay attention to the job at hand. Yet, waiting in line is boring. lol
Delete"He was a man she could—" Tee-hee. I liked that!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Chrys.
DeleteIan gives the feel of being potential trouble, possibly in a good way. Even though he isn't in the scene. Nice!
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