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I'm sharing snippets from The Spy: An Outer Rim Novel. It's the 4th book in my series featuring strong women on the frontier of space.
Because this is a work in progress, suggestions are greatly appreciated. Please excuse the creative punctuation, necessary to keep this within the guidelines. Do you remember the chatty taxi driver with the loud "Hawaiian" shirt? He's baaack.
As
she strolled away from headquarters, Genna kept her eyes open and her senses
alert. Suddenly, a conveyance swooped down ahead of
her, the Chellian driver stuck his head out the window and hailed her, “Ready
for that tour now?”
By
the Matriarch, it was him, the driver who’d brought her from spaceport—she’d
disguised herself, changed her clothes, and wore a wig, she’d even thrown away
his card so how did he recognize her?
She
ignored him and kept walking.
He
cruised along beside her, his forearm resting on the open window, “Is there a
reason you don’t want to ride with me? It’s my shirt, isn’t it? Some
Bricaldians think it’s too flashy, but since you’re not a Bric, I didn’t think
you’d mind.”
“How
do you know I’m not Bricaldian?”
“You’re
Traishan, right?” He nodded his head, “Yep. Traishan.”
“It’s
not the shirt. I don’t care about superficial things like that.”
I didn't think much more of him than that he was annoying. But after learning about her mission, I think he is more of a concern. Intriguing snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jess.
DeleteGreat snippet. It makes me worried that he knows everything about her and won’t back off, when asked. Makes me motivated to keep reading to see if he’ll turn out to be an enemy or if he’ll end up helping her.
ReplyDeleteKeep smiling,
Yawatta
Thanks, Yawatta.
DeleteHaha! It's the shirt. lol
ReplyDeleteI am sort of worried about this guy, though. How'd he so easily see through her disguise? And he might be a little obsessive.
Or, is he working for someone--keeping an eye on her, or worse?
Great snippet, Diane!
Thanks, Teresa.
DeleteThis guy is too colorful to be insignificant. I wonder if he's her target--or vice versa? Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jenna.
DeleteWhat a delious snippet, my friend. Fascinating to read. I'm looking forward to next week.
ReplyDeleteCharmaine, you're so sweet.
DeleteHe's a bit too pushy and too smart - I suspect danger.
ReplyDeleteTweeted.
Thanks for tweeting, Daryl.
DeleteHahaha, if he isn't dangerous or threatens the job then he may be my favourite so far. I like the humor here.
ReplyDeleteLOL He is a character. (pun intended)
DeleteIf I were her, I would rethink my disguise. I'd also super spy him to the ground and find out what his deal is.
ReplyDeleteSounds like a good plan. Better than running away from him.
DeleteOh GOOD. I had a feeling about him and hoped we'd see him again - this will be interesting! I'm really enjoying the story and today's snippet was terrific.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Veronica.
DeleteI love this! It's futuristic yet kind of vintage in the way he approaches her. Reminds me of a scene from one of the great drive-in movie date flicks.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Dixie. Never thought about the drive-in movies.
DeleteShe's in a fix. She can't explain what bugs her about him, because then she'd have to explain why she disguised herself.
ReplyDeleteYou got it, Ed.
DeleteInteresting how he was onto her the second she appeared. Does she have a tell? OR does she have someone tellING...HMMMM. Can't wait to read more. Great job.
ReplyDeleteThanks, JS.
DeleteWell, she has a problem now.
ReplyDeleteShe does indeed.
DeleteInteresting snippet. I'm curious about this guy.
ReplyDeleteOh, good. :)
DeleteI wonder what his deal is. I definitely think he'll have more of a part to play than just giving her a tour.
ReplyDeleteHe's an entrepreneur, all right.
DeleteThere's something off about him. I think danger approaches. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elyzabeth. You could be right. Or not. :)
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