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This week's snippet is from my sci-fi romance, The Protector (An Outer Rim Novel). Last week, as Rissa is helping the two girls out the spaceport restroom window, a man yells, “Hey, open up.”
As always, apologies for the creative punctuation, which was done to keep within the sentence limit.
“Gimme a min,” Rissa yelled back.
“I promise to come for you,” she
whispered to the girls, hoping they would wait for her outside the spaceport.
As she walked out of the san-fac, a
mech glared at her saying, “Whadda mean by locking the door?”
“Didn’t want you walking in on me,”
she said then glanced over at a commotion near the freighter where she’d delivered
the supplies, “What’s going on?”
The Chellian pilot was yelling and
his two crewmen were darting between ships, searching.
“Damn offworlder,” the mech said as
he brushed past her into the san-fac.
"You!" The pilot stormed
up to Rissa, yelling, “What did you do with them, where are those two girls?”
Rissa affected a confused
expression and said, “What girls?”
“My cargo, I mean passengers—damn
you to Lexol’s Fire, how did you get them out?”
Who knew rescuing two girls from traffickers would bring down a world of hurt?
After tavern owner Rissa Dix rescues two girls from a slave ship, she must rally the townsfolk to prevent traffickers from returning. Mining heir Dillan Rusteran has loved her for years. Little do they know that by rescuing more children they're tangling with a galactic trafficking ring.
This snippet is so fine. You're writing a fascinating tale.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Charmaine.
DeleteOh, I can picture that scene perfectly. Well done! :)
ReplyDeleteI appreciate your saying so. Thanks.
DeleteEnjoyed the excerpt, especially the way things are heating up in the vicinity. Nice tension!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica.
DeleteSuch a small start to such a huge problem. Good job, Diane. Excellent excerpt.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kim.
DeleteRun, girls, run! Great scene, Diane.
ReplyDeleteThey'd better. Thanks, Leah.
DeleteGreat snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Michelle.
DeleteGREAT snippet Diane!
ReplyDeleteGood luck and God's blessings
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Thanks, Pam.
DeleteWow- guess she acted just in time. But it sounds like the search will be on very soon.
ReplyDeleteOh, yeah. And they're blaming Rissa.
DeleteGlad Rissa doesn't lose her cool and help those girls.
ReplyDeleteTweeted.
She's a cool customer, all right. She's a barkeep in a mining town. Not much makes her lose it.
DeleteI hope the girls are indeed waiting for her ... I guess. Unless that would mean the angry pilot would find them.
ReplyDeleteThose girls are growing up fast.
DeleteGreat snippet! :D
ReplyDeleteThanks, Amy.
DeleteGreat snippet. Could picture the scene perfectly. So glad Rissa is on the girls side.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen. Those girls are so lucky Rissa found them instead of the pilot or his crew.
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