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Thanks for all your comments on last week's snippet. This week, I'm sharing a new story, a work-in-progress. Suggestions are very welcome. It's a romantic suspense about a woman who doesn't believe her brother's car crash was an accident. This is how it begins.
The
garage door rose. All by itself.
Maggie
Sinclair’s heart shot into high gear. She set down the camping equipment next
to her SUV. She wasn’t anywhere near the button next to the door to the house.
And the remote was right where it belonged, clipped to the Suburban’s visor. She hadn’t opened the door.
Someone
had keyed in the code.
As
the door lifted, a pair of athletic shoes and legs encased in wrinkled khakis
came into view. Only one other person knew the code to her garage. The numb-nut
scaring her half to death had better be him.
Yikes! My heart is beating a little faster here. Fabulous snippet! 😄 Though, it reminds me of a time we were visiting my grandmother, and the key fob for our vehicle triggered a neighbor's garage door to open.
ReplyDeleteJess, you made my day. Thanks for the kind words. LOL at your story about the key fob. That must have been scary for the neighbor.
DeleteWhat a beautifully suspenseful way of setting this scene. Good job.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ed. And congrats on your SFR Galaxy award.
DeleteWhew! What an exciting beginning!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Christina.
DeleteWow, that's quite the beginning! Intrigued by the story and the snippet...
ReplyDeleteOh, I'm so glad, Veronica. Thanks.
DeleteBeautifully descriptive, a great start to what promises to be a very intriguing story. Can't wait to read more
ReplyDeleteThanks, Naomi.
DeleteWow - great way to start a story, brilliantly suspenseful!
ReplyDeleteGood. Thanks, Lyn.
DeleteYou captured her emotions well- from alarm to fear to anger-while creating great suspense. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you saw all that. Thanks.
DeleteWhat if it's not who she thinks?? ;)
ReplyDeleteYou'll see next week. She doesn't stand around waiting for danger.
DeleteEntertaining beginning. I hope it's who she expects.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Aurora.
Delete"The numb-nut scaring her half to death had better be him."
ReplyDeleteThat was the perfect wrap up to this snippet!
Thanks, Teresa.
DeleteGreat opening lines and great opening. Draws the read right in - who is the numb-nut is. Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Daryl.
DeleteI love the way you balance fright with humor! Fun start to the new project.
ReplyDeleteThank, Nancy. High praise from you.
DeleteShe's on edge... hopefully this visitor will be able to smooth that a bit.
ReplyDeleteMaybe...maybe not.
DeleteFear, relief and anger for making her scared... great roller coaster of emotions in this snippet. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen.
DeleteOh my, what if it isn't him? I hope she is armed, or can hide.
ReplyDeleteNext snippet will tell.
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