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Thanks for all your comments on last week's snippet. I'm sharing a work-in-progress, tentatively titled Unpredictable Nature, a romantic suspense about a woman who doesn't believe her brother's car crash was an accident.
Suggestions are very welcome. Please excuse the rogue commas.
Today's snippet picks up right after last week's, which ended with “Can’t I visit my kid sister?”
Maggie put her hands on her
hips and gave him the look that could quell a roomful of high school seniors
full of themselves for being on the brink of adulthood and sophomores who were
just full of themselves. “When you thought I wasn’t going to be home? Try again,
Ace.”
Jack cuffed her around the
neck. “Okay, you got me--I wanted to try out a new CD on your system.”
She ducked out from under
his arm, then hip bumped him, “The truth comes out.”
His combination Christmas
and birthday gift to her a couple of years ago was a sophisticated sound
system. After he set it up, he’d left detailed—printed, no less—instructions
for its use. That was Jack, always covering the bases--heaven forbid, he leave
anything to chance, even his sister’s CD player.
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Hmm, I wonder what he wants to listen to. I have a feeling there is more to the story still. Intriguing!
ReplyDeleteLots more. Thanks, Jess.
DeleteTheir chemistry really comes through, Diane.
ReplyDeleteI have you on the linky list now. I have forgotten to sign up so many times... :-)
Yes heaven forbid. Love the sibling quabble.
ReplyDeleteLOL Thanks, Trin.
DeleteStill wondering why he was so evasive at first. Nice sibling banter with a layer of tension underneath.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Alexis.
DeleteAh - but is he telling her the truth?
ReplyDeleteGood question.
DeleteUgh... my husband does the same. Lovely idea, but sometimes annoying. There are instructions that come with such doo-dads.
ReplyDeleteLOL, Sue. Until the grandkids got old enough to turn on the TV, we had to ask son-in-law to write out directions.
DeleteAnd she believes that? I don't quite think I do. Can't wait to find out if I'm right!
ReplyDeleteShe's no dummy, Jenna. And neither are you.
DeleteLike the others, I don't think his explanation is the whole truth and nothing but the truth.
ReplyDeleteGreat thinking, Ed.
DeleteWell, I still suspect some other ulterior motive but I guess we'll see! For sure I'm hooked though...great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThat's good. I guess I'll have to skip ahead a bit next week.
DeleteLol - detailed - printed no less - instructions. Sounds like someone I am married to.
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet. Glad you made it here this week.
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One of those 'gifts' that's really for the giver, I see.
ReplyDeleteHmm, obviously more to this than meets the eye! Great snippet, kept me wanting more!
ReplyDeletelol, I'm not sure she appreciate all the fuse about sounds.
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