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Thanks to everyone who visited last week, which wasn't a good week for me. After dealing with my husband's health issues, I had no energy to visit. I will try to hit both your post last week and this one on my visits.
I'm sharing snippets from The Pilot: An Outer Rim Novel. It's the 1st book in a series featuring strong women on the frontier of space. When Celara's ship is hailed by one claiming to be Coalition Security, she gives them the slip in an asteroid field. In this snippet, she's landed at Vesteron Colony to deliver her cargo. There. a mechanic catches her eye.
Please excuse the creative punctuation, necessary to keep this within the guidelines. It's also edited a little from the original.
“Did you arrive on that
hauler?” He nodded to her ship, his voice, a tantalizing allure of baritone and
chokiris, sounded vaguely familiar.
“Yep, that’s my ship,” She
tucked her thumbs into the side pockets of her trousers and thrust out her
chest a little in pride, “D’Enfaden’s
Thermopylae, fastest little transport in three sectors.”
He walked past her to
examine her ship then ran his hand—long, strong fingers, she noted—over the
dents and scrapes along the aft section, “It appears to have sustained damage.”
“My thruster gimbal got
damaged when I kissed an asteroid evading filthy pirates—they didn’t catch me,
though,” She grinned, “Hey, you new around here? Don’t remember seeing you
before—and I sure would remember seeing you.”
He arched his dark eyebrow.
She raised her hand, palm
outward, in the traditional indie greeting, “Celara d’Enfaden.” As he stared at
her with green eyes as sharp and clear as veridion, she raised her own eyebrow,
“And you are . . .”
There's no place like home, and he stole hers.
Life on the frontier of space is hard enough so when pirates stole Celara d'Enfaden's cargo, she vowed not to be tricked again.
Determined to make an example out of indie pilots who disobey orders, Coalition Administrator Trevarr Jovano impounds Celara’s starship and cargo. If he backs down, he’ll lose respect. If she can’t deliver her cargo, she’ll default on her loan and lose her only home—her ship.
More important than her ship, though, is her brother. To rescue him from a galactic gangster, she’ll even work with Jovano who is bent on avenging his wife’s murder.
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Oh my gawd, still laughter. And I still want to warn her. She's met her match, but them again...he's just met his. LOVE this book. :-)
ReplyDeleteTeresa, you are such a boost to my writing ego. Oh, heck. To my ego. Thank you so much.
DeleteLonging to know who he is, and a voice that sounds familiar...🤗
ReplyDeleteOh, yeah. She finds out in the next paragraph, which I'll post next week.
DeleteYour dialogue and narratives are always so awesome. Ya gotta love Celara!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy. I needed that boost. I do love Celara. She's one of my fav characters.
DeleteDiane, I confess I also love Celara. She speaks right out!
ReplyDeleteShe's not shy.
DeleteHis voice sounds familiar? Sounds like his identity is going to surprise her. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteI figure communication between ships might not sounds the same as in person. Oh, yeah. His ID is going to be a big surprise to her.
DeleteI too noted the "vaguely familiar" about his voice. So they've met before? Is this going to be a good surprise or a bad one? Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteI guess you'll have to wait until next week, Jenna. :)
DeleteI hope your husband is doing better! Best wishes to him and to you, scary stuff. I'm enjoying the story...have no idea what 'chokiris' is though? I feel like the heroine is going to be getting some unpleasant surprises soon, but I'll be turning the pages. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica. He's getting better. Scary indeed. Sorry about chokiris. It was explained in the beginning that I didn't include. Oops. It's a liquor. Surprise coming up.
DeleteHope your husband is feeling better! I very much enjoyed this snippet. It reveals so much about both characters. Looking forward to learning more about them! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Julie. Hopefully, Hubs is on the mend with no setbacks. Glad you liked the snippet.
DeleteShe's much friendlier and open than he seems to be.
ReplyDeleteDon't worry about making up for last week's visit; you had an excellent excuse!
Thanks, Ed. I don't like to miss reading the snippets. Too confusing. He is definitely buttoned up, where she's a free spirit. Makes for a good contrast.
DeleteI hope your husband is recovering now, Diane. I really enjoyed this snippet, I have a feeling sparks are about to fly!
ReplyDeleteI hope your husband is doing better now. She must know him from somewhere, and like Hywela, I bet the sparks are about to fly.
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