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Saturday, May 23, 2020

#WeWriWa ~ THE SPY: Rimmer Girl?


Each weekend, the Weekend Writing Warriors share an 8 - 10 sentence snippet. Be sure to visit the other authors. You can find them here.

Thanks to everyone who visited last week. Somehow, I forgot to finish visiting some of you. So very sorry. I'm taking care of that before visiting for this week.

I'm sharing snippets from The Spy: An Outer Rim Novel. It's the 4th book in my series featuring strong women on the frontier of space.

Because this is a work in progress, suggestions are greatly appreciated. The chatty "taxi" driver caught up with Genna outside headquarters. Before leaving HQ, she changed into a baggy shirt and trousers. She's now in his conveyance.

Dodging the heavy traffic in the skies above the capital city required concentration, not chit-chat with her. She was about to remind him of that when he deftly swerved around slower traffic. She prayed to the Matriarch that he would get her to her destination without an accident. Wait, she never told him a destination.
“Take me to—”
“I’m off-duty, and I’m hungry. We’re going to Filiana’s. You’ll love the food, and it’s  located near spaceport. That's where you want to go, right?”


Here's the rest:

“Yes, but--"
"C'mon, Rimmer Girl, you have to eat before taking off for your Matriarch knows where."
"Hold on. How do you know I’m a Rimmer?”
“Your clothes.” Again, he glanced back at her. “You wear them like a native, not a fake like those idiot colonists swarming over every planet out on the Rim.”
“How would a conveyance operator in Eleganza know about Rimmer colonists?”
“I’m well educated.” He laughed, a hearty belly laugh.


Blurb (draft):

Rookie agent must rescue veteran before his cover is blown.

Genna Nogaro, new to the Coalition of Planets’ Intelligence Commission, is assigned to bring in an undercover operative in Hallart’s organization. More experienced agents died before getting him out. Were they killed by the intergalactic gangster or has the operative gone rogue?

Quintall d’Sernin, con man extraordinaire, infiltrated the mob and moved up to be the gangster’s right-hand man. Hallart has his tentacles throughout the Coalition—business, industry, and government. Quin’s finally worked himself into a valued position. All he needs is the key to mob structure in order for Coalition forces to take down the entire organization.

Genna will pose as a new recruit to distract Hallart long enough for Quin to find the key. If they work together, they can accomplish more. But Quin and Genna’s lives are jeopardized by a mole in the Intelligence Commission. Will their true roles be revealed before they accomplish their goal?


Enjoy this Memorial Day Weekend as best you can while staying safe. As for us, Hubs and I will celebrate on our deck watching the ducks in the pond.



29 comments:

  1. Well educated... Hmm, I think he knows a lot more than he's letting on.

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  2. I am so intrigued about this character... Nice job writing him.

    Is he minor--but demanded a larger presence in the book?

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  3. Do you think I'm going to answer that? LOL

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    1. LOLOL! That non-answer was a perfect answer! lol

      I got your sign up removed. Hope the computer problems are short-lived. Hugs...

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  4. Charmaine Gordon May 24, 2020 at 8:3O a.m.
    Fascinating snippet. nd.I'm interested in what happens next.

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  5. Well educated - now that can be good and helpful for her or...sinister. I'm hoping for good.
    Tweeted.

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    1. Thanks, as always, for tweeting, Daryl. He's yanking her chain.

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  6. I LIKE him. Another terrific excerpt, leaving me wanting more (even with our now relaxed rules that let you add more sentences!).

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    1. Thanks so much, Veronica. I love not having to tweak my sentences.

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  7. I'm sure he's more than just educated! I'm waiting for the fireworks.

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  8. Well-educated? LOL! Probably technically true but likely not from any general education. The question is, is he an asset or a threat?

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  9. I like “You wear them like a native, not a fake like those idiot colonists swarming over every planet out on the Rim.” With his observational skills (if he isn't a villain) I would keep him around for Intel. Great snippet!

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  10. Very well written. I loved the interaction between these two characters. I'm coming in in the middle more or less but I think you're doing a great job! Intriguing snippet.

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  11. Haha, this guy is quite a handful. I'm really enjoying the interplay between these two. Great writing, Diane!

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  12. What's with this guy? Is he a secret agent, too?

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    1. He's giving her (and you) lots to think about.

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  13. I enjoyed their back and forth. I hope the cab driver was just being nice, and not a stalker.

    Keep smiling,
    Yawatta

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    1. Thanks, Yawatta. With your mindset from your story, I can see where you'd think that.

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  14. He sure knows a lot. Intriguing snippet. Makes me want to know more.

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  15. What a great bit of conversation! I want to know where it leads. Thanks for sharing.

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