Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, where writers share snippets from their work-in-progress or new release. Sorry to have been AWOL for a few weekends.
I'm sharing snippets from the 4th Alex O'Hara cozy mystery, The Case of the Wedding Wrecker. This follows immediately after the last snippet. Alex and her dad followed police deputy Dawson (aka Deputy Dawg, Alex's nemesis since 2nd grade) who interrupted the wedding ceremony by arresting Nick for the murder of Mike Amerson, Todd's stepfather. Todd is holding the door at the police station for Alex and her dad.
BTW, since this is a work in progress, suggestions are always welcome.
Snippet:
I’d looped the
train over my arm. As soon as I had a second, I was unhooking it—or whatever to
free me from tripping over the damn thing. As soon as we entered the station, Sharon
Amerson, Todd’s mother, who had been sitting on a bench, ran up to him.
“He’s gone,”
she sobbed. The small woman flung herself into his arms. “Your father is dead.”
Todd stiffened
before holding her in an awkward embrace. “My father died seven years
ago, Mom. Mike isn’t . . . wasn’t my father.”
She cried even
harder before looking up at her son. She held his shoulders. “Oh, my boy. You are
so handsome. Where . . . Why are you all dressed up?”
“Mo-om, I told
you about the wedding. You were invited. Mr. Nick and Miss Alex—”
“You!” Sharon
pointed at me. “It’s all your fault. If you hadn’t interfered, Mike would still
be alive.”
When she
charged at me, Deputy Jenny Sampson burst around the locked barrier into the
lobby. Since Rose was at the church, Jenny manned—womanned?—the dispatch desk. Todd
grabbed his mother’s arms and held her back.
“Mom, what are
you doing?”
“They killed
your father. The two of them.” She sobbed and fell into her son’s arms.
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Well, she can accuse all she wants, but she's wrong. And she'd better have proof or I'm going to recommend that Alex sue her. :-)
ReplyDeletePoor Alex. Truly a wrecked wedding day!
LOL Teresa, I love your solution.
DeleteI hope Dawson had more proof than this woman's ramblings before arresting Nick! Gosh, this seems like such a mess! But, great writing!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jess. Oh, he has lots of proof.
DeleteShe seems to be rambling in her grief. How awful the wedding is ruined.
ReplyDeleteRambling is right. But her son knows the truth--Nick couldn't be the killer.
DeleteThe plot thickens! This surely isn't the way one's wedding day ought to be going. Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteNo, it isn't. Thanks for the tweet.
DeleteA dramatic scene! And she's still wearing the dress.
ReplyDeleteIncluding the train and veil. She looks a wreck.
DeleteOh my, drama and more tension! Really a great excerpt and makes me NEED to know more.
ReplyDeleteSuper! Thanks for letting me know.
DeleteAnd, as they say, the plot thickens! So this woman thinks they were both in on it? Keep ramping up that tension, Diane! Great snippet! Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jenna.
DeleteThe day gets worse and worse.
ReplyDeleteIt does!
Deletewommaned? - LOL
ReplyDeleteTweeted.
Sorry I'm so late - busy busy day.
You're not late. Glad you like "wommaned."
Deletewommanned - ha, ha, love it. Sounds like quite the mess going on. I feel really bad for the bride. I hope she gets a wedding redo.
ReplyDeleteIt is an awful mess.
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ReplyDeleteIt seems you're writing up that proverbial storm, Diane. Congratulations. Loved the snippets you shared.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Lee. Writing is going well.
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