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I'm sharing snippets from the 4th Alex O'Hara cozy mystery, The Case of the Wedding Wrecker. This follows immediately after last week's snippet. Police deputy Dawson (aka Deputy Dawg, Alex's nemesis since 2nd grade) interrupted the wedding ceremony by arresting Nick for the murder of Mike Amerson, Todd's stepfather.
BTW, since this is a work in progress, suggestions are always welcome.
Snippet:
“Let’s deal
with facts until we know more.”
Good advice
from my dad. I needed to take it because I was speculating on what had just
happened. Mike Amerson was dead. Not to speak ill of the dead, but he deserved
whatever he got. But why arrest Nick? I’m the one who had motive. That man had
been a thorn in my side for nearly a year. He’d threatened me, roughed me up,
vowed to get even when I broke his nose.
Nick never did
anything to the brute.
As soon as the limo
stopped in front of the red brick Public Safety building, Todd jumped out. He’d
taken two loping strides before looking back at me trying to slide out of the
limo. He raced back, saw that Pop had opened the limo door, hesitated until I
caught up with the boy—young man. Almost sixteen.
I clutched his
hand. “It will be all right.”
“Hey,” the
driver called. “Want me to wait?”
I glanced over
my shoulder. “Yes. No. I don’t know.” I couldn’t think.
“I’m scheduled
until seven.”
“Wait then.” Again,
hitching up the too-tight skirt I ran up the steps.
Pop held my arm,
but I don’t know who was holding up whom. He breathed so hard I worried about
him having a heart attack. My first thought was to slow down, but I needed to
find out about Nick. Todd raced ahead to get the door. That boy’s manners
overcame his need to know what had gone wrong.
Wow, so much to take in with this snippet! But the overall feeling I get is that some (including a certain police officer) have a vendetta against Nick. I'm very intrigued with this story!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jess. He has a vendetta, all right, but it's toward Alex.
DeleteVery intense! Wow...but leaves me eager to know more of course. Really a well done snippet and quite the engrossing story to date.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Veronica.
DeleteSooooo good! Visual, emotional without being cluttered. The reader is right there with her looking for answers.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy. Great feedback.
DeleteI can't wait to see what happens next!
ReplyDeleteGreat!
DeleteWow! There was no good place for you to stop the snippet for this week! lol Looking forward to more!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Teresa. It's always hard to know where to stop.
DeleteWell done! I hear the character's voice in the narrative.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elizabeth. So glad to hear that.
DeleteThis excerpt captured my attention with no trouble at all. Good job.
ReplyDeleteGreat. Thanks for telling me, Elaine.
DeleteYour snippet (and this story) has me on the edge of my seat each week! I so want to know what the heck is going on! You've hooked me but good, Diane! Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteCan you see my big grin? Your comment made my day.
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