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This snippet is from my sci-fi romance, The Protector (An Outer Rim Novel). In last week's snippet, Rissa and friends arrived at spaceport to stop the traffickers from leaving. They've all donned similar outfits, including hoods and masks, nothing to identify them. Rissa and her bartender have gone inside the spaceport, while the others waited at the back door for her signal.
Kiran yanked the back of Rissa’s shirt
and hauled her behind a mech’s station. She was about to protest when she heard
the whoosh of the hangar doors—two distinct male voices sounded jubilant.
“Easy pickings,” one crowed.
“Except we nearly got caught with these
two,” the other said, “who’da thought they’d start searching so soon.”
Rissa peered around the tall tool chest
and nearly gasped out loud—two men each carried a limp boy under his arm heading for the Indigian transport. By the Exalted One, she had to stop them. When
she pulled the LZ-9 pistol out of the lower pocket of her trousers, Kiran
grabbed her shoulder . . . and held out her hood.
“Oh, all right,” she mouthed and
slipped it on—the mask didn’t fit well, and she had to adjust it so she could
see.
He grabbed her long braid, stopping her
again—when he tucked the braid inside her shirt, she shot him an angry look, angrier
at herself for forgetting.
Leveling her pistol at the men, she
stepped out, saying, “Where do you think you’re going?”
Who knew rescuing two girls from traffickers would bring down a world of hurt?
After tavern owner Rissa Dix rescues two girls from a slave ship, she must rally the townsfolk to prevent traffickers from returning. Mining heir Dillan Rusteran has loved her for years. Little do they know that by rescuing more children they're tangling with a galactic trafficking ring.
Great line:Leveling her pistol at the men, she stepped out, saying, “Where do you think you’re going?”
ReplyDeleteStopping by from #wewrima
Thanks, Trin.
DeleteGood thing he's looking out for her!! She was ready to charge off half cocked.
ReplyDeleteGood thing. She's so caught up in the moment.
DeleteThank goodness for Kiran being there. I hope he and Rissa are able to get the kids back. Great snippet! :)
ReplyDeleteKiran is more than her bartender. Friend, confidante, backwatcher. (BTW, not the hero.)
DeleteI really like Kiran. Glad he was looking out for her. Enjoyed the snippet.
ReplyDeleteGood thing he watches her back.
DeleteGive 'em heck, Rissa. And Kiran, good job.
ReplyDeleteLOL, Ed.
DeleteOooh, this is gonna be interesting. I'm surprised she didn't just shoot them then and there, but I guess they're going for the more stealthy approach.
ReplyDeleteYeah, there are other considerations. Like the law.
DeleteExciting story well told, Diane. You have a super imagination.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Charmaine. That means a lot.
DeleteI like her! Great character!
ReplyDeleteAnd I love the name "Rissa". She's also my MC from the first book I wrote 12 years ago (still editing it). I chose the name because my daughter told me it means 'laughter'.
That is so cool about Rissa. I don't know how I thought up her name. Something easy to pronounce but different.
DeleteWow, this bad situation just keeps expanding, doesn't it? I'm glad she was there and hope the rescue goes off ok! Great snippet...
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica. Yep, it will get worse next week. ;)
DeleteYay! So glad she's there to help!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kim.
DeleteHi Diane, so glad I stopped by to see your blog. www.gretapicklesimer.wordpress.com
ReplyDeleteThanks, Greta. Glad to see you here.
DeleteThis is so gripping, another great excerpt, I do hope they succeed in the rescue!
ReplyDeleteIt will get worse before it gets better. Thanks, Hywela.
DeleteGripping. Hopefully it will be a quick and easy rescue - but I doubt that. We writers are never happy with easy. Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteLOL, Daryl. We have to keep throwing rocks at them up in that tree.
DeleteIt's a good thing Kiran is there!
ReplyDeleteThat's a tough situation to be in!
ReplyDeleteYep. And it gets worse.
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