This week's snippet is from my sci-fi romance, The Protector (An Outer Rim Novel). Rissa rescued two young teen girls from traffickers and taken them to her quarters above her tavern. She just returned from getting clothes for them while they bathed. Pela is the older, more defiant one; Anaris, the more frightened.
Pela broke the silence, saying, “What
are you going to do with us?”
Rissa sat on the end of her bed across
from them and said, “I can find transport so you can return home.”
“No,” Pela said sharply, “I won’t go
back.”
Anaris looked even more frightened and
whimpered, “Please don’t.”
With delicate probing, Rissa got their
stories—both girls had been sold by their fathers to the traffickers—and her
heart twisted for them. How could a parent not appreciate the gift of life given
to them?
After Rissa reined in her anger, she said, “You have a
choice where to go, what to do--nobody will force you.”
Pela stood in front of Rissa and said,
“Why are you helping us—what’s in it for you?”
“Repentance.”
Who knew rescuing two girls from traffickers would bring down a world of hurt?
After tavern owner Rissa Dix rescues two girls from a slave ship, she must rally the townsfolk to prevent traffickers from returning. Mining heir Dillan Rusteran has loved her for years. Little do they know that by rescuing more children they're tangling with a galactic trafficking ring.
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I understand why they don't want to return anywhere. And that last line is definitely intriguing. :)
ReplyDeleteGood. ;)
DeleteFrom rescuer to mom -- Rissa's burden just got heavier.
ReplyDeleteYou bet it did.
DeleteRepentance.
ReplyDeleteSuch a huge word, Diane. And very intriguing.
You cannot imagine how I fretted over that word. Tried others but kept coming back to this one.
DeleteHonest answer. Wonder what's behind it.
ReplyDeleteYou hit on a big point.
DeleteNow, is she repenting something she did, or more likely, something done by her family or connections?
ReplyDeleteGood question.
DeleteOohh - repentance - that's always good for a story - will provide lots of lovely conflict :-)
ReplyDeleteTweeted.
Thanks for the tweet, Daryl. Lots of conflict is right
DeleteWell written, the whole snippet is a gem.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Charmaine.
DeleteOh those poor girls! And she's obviously going to have to explain her remark in more depth so I'll be highly intrigued to see what she has to share. Great snippet, affecting.
ReplyDeleteShe will eventually explain. But not right away.
DeleteOh, fascinating last line. I can't wait to discover more of her story.
ReplyDeleteYou know what "they" always tell us about info dumps? :)
DeleteGreat snippet, Diane! Happy she rescued the girls and definitely can't wait to see what her story is of why she did it.
ReplyDeleteThanks. She's gotten over one hurdle, with more ahead.
DeleteHm, what's she going to do with two young sidekicks? Interesting!
ReplyDeleteShe'll find something. :)
DeletePoor girls! And that last line says it all, doesn't it - as well as raising more questions!
ReplyDeleteI hope it does.
DeleteKiller last line, Di! Set that hook!
ReplyDeleteHehe.
DeleteOooo that last word opens so many questions. Nice!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Amy.
DeleteDreadful parents, but what is the repentence for? Good hook.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elizabeth.
DeleteSo glad she's looking out for them.
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