Thanks to everyone who visited last week. I love your comments as you try to figure out where the story is going. Last week, Dillan confronted Rissa in the dark spaceport, assuming she and her cohorts are robbing the ship next to his.
Rissa never had to look up to most men,
other than Kiran. Her size used to bother her, but since she began running a
tavern on the Frontier, she was grateful for her height and strength, yet this
man made her feel small. When she looked up, her hood and mask slipped so much she
couldn’t see him very well. His overlong hair hung down to blend in with a
heavy beard, and his broad shoulders and chest made her think twice about
taking him down—that and the blaster in his hand.
“Am I interrupting something?” he asked
with fake casualness.
“Nah,” she said, trying to disguise her
voice and waved her hand, equally casual, “just a little surprise party for the
pilot.”
“Stealing a man’s cargo is hardly
worthy of a party,” he said, his tone no longer casual but harsh, “what the—”
Rissa looked over her shoulder at Pela,
a child attached to both of her hands, as she led a parade of children to the
open back door of the spaceport where Kiran waved her forward.
“Is that a slave ship?” the man behind
her demanded.
After leaving the children with Kiran, Pela
rushed to Rissa, crying, “The kids are really scared, the pilot told them slavers
might try to take them away.”
Apologies for the creative punctuation, which was done to keep within the sentence limit.
Who knew rescuing two girls from traffickers would bring down a world of hurt?
After tavern owner Rissa Dix rescues two girls from a slave ship, she must rally the townsfolk to prevent traffickers from returning. Mining heir Dillan Rusteran has loved her for years. Little do they know that by rescuing more children they're tangling with a galactic trafficking ring.
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Weekend Writing Warriors. A great idea, especially for those who find time to,write during the week difficult, Diane.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Carole. Not my idea, though. It's a fun group with great stories.
DeleteNow that he knows the truth, I wonder if he will help.
ReplyDeleteGuess you'll have to wait to find out. ;)
DeleteI'm sensing a hero in the making. She could use one about now.
ReplyDeleteShe sure could.
DeleteOh my Gosh, it could go either way. Perhaps he will be a savior in this case. Good snip.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Charmaine.
DeleteClearly the answer to his question is "Yes". He doesn't sound happy.
ReplyDeleteHe's ticked off about something else.
DeleteIs he a good guy or a bad guy? Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteGood question. Thanks.
DeleteHopefully he'll help them!
ReplyDeleteHe'd better. :)
DeleteHeight and strength are definitely great attributes to running a tavern. Good characterization.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Trin. I try not to dump info but sprinkle it in.
DeleteI think he might turn out to be a good guy. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Rachel.
DeleteNow we get to find out how he'll react. Hope he's a friend, considering how big and intimidating he is.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you caught the bit about his size.
DeleteReally an engrossing and tense story so yes, I hope he's going to be a good guy! Excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica.
DeleteHe's quick at sizing up the situation.
ReplyDeleteYes, he is.
DeleteI'm with the others in thinking (and hoping) he's going to turn out to be the 'good guy'. It looks like she certainly could use another friend!
ReplyDeleteNever can have enough friends.
DeleteI don't know how this chap fits into the story, but I sense disapproval in his question about slavers, and that's promising.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ed.
DeleteSo, technically, theft. In reality, he should help them all get out of there before the slavers come back!
ReplyDeleteRight.
DeleteI do hope he's one of the good guys. Love the description of him.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen.
DeleteI sense a Wonder Woman-ness about her. Great description. Looking forward to more interactions with these two!
ReplyDeleteThere will definitely be more interaction. ;)
DeleteSounds like a very interesting world you've created!
ReplyDeleteI like it! Totally hooked. Went to Amazon to buy it--and got a reminder that I already have it on my Kindle.
ReplyDeleteHow good is this story? Worth buying twice. :-)