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New month, new book. My snippet today is from The Pilot (An Outer Rim Novel: Book 1). The Outer Rim series is about strong women on the frontier of space. In this snippet, Celara meets Trevarr for the first time in person. Unbeknowst to either, they'd met in space when he tried to board her ship. Now they're at closest spaceport.
As she stared at his butt, all she could think was oh, mama, and hoped he was human, that the rest of him lived up to the preview--better yet, she hoped he was in a
party mood. After escaping from the pirates, Celara wanted to howl . . . and
someone to howl with.
“Hey, big boy,” she called to the mechanic, “wanna party?”
Life on the frontier of space is hard enough for a freighter pilot, so when pirates stole Celara
d'Enfaden's cargo, she vowed not to be tricked again. Determined to make an
example out of indie pilots who disobey orders, Coalition Administrator Trevarr
Jovano impounds Celara’s starship and cargo. If he backs down, he’ll lose
respect. If she can’t deliver her cargo, she’ll default on her loan and lose
her only home—her ship. More important than her ship, though, is her brother.
To rescue him from a galactic gangster, she’ll even work with Trevarr who’s
bent on avenging his wife’s murder.
Am I right in understanding that underneath that gorgeous exterior lurks a potential enemy?
ReplyDeleteLOL Or a potential lover???
Delete...Which can both be the same thing, ha. Nice snippet!
DeleteI love how she ogles him. And how true -- in space you can't make any assumptions from the back view what a person is going to be!
ReplyDeleteFabulous - smiled through the whole excerpt. Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteYup. I have to agree with her. ;)
ReplyDeleteHe's a hunk, all right.
DeleteI see why she's into him. You got his physical descriptions down pat!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Frank.
DeleteDelicious bit of description. Oh yeah! Good writing.
ReplyDeleteThanks.
DeleteGreat description--yeah, he's a hunk all right. For some reason I kept thinking of Princess Leia ogling Han Solo! LOL Delicious snippet!
ReplyDeleteOoh, I like that image. I've been ogling Han since 1977. :)
DeleteHaha, this was so great, Diane! Love the impure thoughts that flit through her mind, and him hitting his head in reaction to her party invitation. :D We all know what kind of party she has in mind. lol
ReplyDeleteEvery now and again, one short, little snippet is enough to drive to me to Amazon to buy a book. This one just did it. I love the humor! When "Do you want to party?" is is a wicked insult, oh my. lol And the descriptive writing is good--but not overwhelming. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteAnd you got a bargain, Teresa. I lowered the price for a SFR Blast.
DeleteFun times ahead- as long as he's not too grumpy!
ReplyDeleteOh, Mama.
ReplyDeleteOh, man. Too bad I can tell from your blurb he's not exactly the partying kind. Looks like Celara is in for a rough time with him.
ReplyDeleteA delicious combination indeed. :)
ReplyDeleteI'm glad she finds him attractive, but I think she's in for an unpleasant surprise.
ReplyDeleteWell, she made quite an impression on him--and on his skull!
ReplyDeleteI wonder which one will have the headache in the end? LOL!
ReplyDeleteI love all the speculation. You guys have wicked imaginations. LOL
ReplyDeleteYes, he sounds very delicious.
ReplyDelete;)
DeleteLove the description of this guy. I'm intrigued.
ReplyDeleteGood.
DeleteI LOVED the snippet. Your character's 'voice' is wonderful :) Terrific!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica.
DeleteOooh, I'm intrigued! He sounds yummy!
ReplyDelete"After escaping from the pirates, Celara wanted to howl . . . and someone to howl with."
ReplyDeleteI had to bite back my giggle because my Accomplice is sleeping beside me, and I think he might react a bit like Mr. Nice Rear View if I woke him giggling at fictional bawdy pirate-ladies in space...
I loved this!
I don't usually like description, but this was delicious! :-)
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
Perfect description of a perfect humk. Nice.
ReplyDeleteYou can't beat an opening line like that!
ReplyDeleteHoo! That was fun. Makes me want to keep reading!
ReplyDeleteLots of energy here. And funny too.
ReplyDeleteLots of energy here. And funny too.
ReplyDeleteLadies, you made me laugh. No waking the Accomplice, Shah.
ReplyDeleteJoyce, I don't like reading descriptions, either. Glad this one was delicious. :)
Deniz, glad to hear that.